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Review of Darkness Within  
Review by Jackie Rocks
Rated: E | (3.0)
I enjoy the topic of the read. I appreciate your honesty regarding your feelings (if they are yours -- if they are not, great job capturing them!), and feel it has a lot of integrity and emotion behind the words -- always great feedback. If i had to give negative (or "constructive" feedback), it would be about the fluency. It seems to go from very fluent to very choppy, a distracting quality. If I were you, I'd stick with one format. I feel like choppy works better for this piece. By chopping, I mean incomplete rhymes (mine and mind), staggering line length, and switching from full sentences to small phrases. Hope this helps. great job!
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Review of Ode to Jewelry  
Review by Jackie Rocks
Rated: E | (4.0)
:) This was a fun read. I enjoyed learning about the jewelry of the past. A few rhymes go together awkwardly, but still a fun fun read.
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