I like it. It's lighthearted and actually took me back a little.
It's simple and direct.
I just raised the rating I gave because as I sit here and think about it, I like it even more.
Love it! Cynicism has become my enemy as of late and I think it's a truer threat than genuine evil. I didn't see any mistakes so good job and thanks for posting =)
HAHAHA! I love it. I don't necessarily agree with this philosophy but women get to rationalize every greedy thing they do and call it "spiritual growth," so go for it.
The narrative style is well used and appropriate. You didn't waste any words and the piece held my interest throughout.
I didn't see any mistakes so good job and thanks for posting =)
HA!
I like it. You raise good points but keep it lighthearted at the same time.
"Conservatives" practice rigorous doublethink in their efforts to hide the fact that they're all pretty much white supremacist war mongers with no souls. This country is great because of progressiveism (is that spelled right?) and it kills me when people say things like 'one nation under God". If people want to live in a theocracy they should move to Iran.
I abhor violence but if I saw Rush Limbaugh or Glenn Beck on fire, I might not put them out.
Waitaminute, I'm ranting.
Didn't see any mistakes. Good job and thanks for posting =)
Nice! Not all poems have to be about turbulent emotional stuff.
This is my favorite time of year. I go camping near this mountain town called Helen. (it deserves the epic name) They celebrate Oktoberfest for about three months while all of the leaves look like fire.
I might do a poem about it later but I've got a project for now.
Thanks for posting!
Creepy. I sort of saw it coming but it still worked.
The details at the beginning don't mean much to the story, but then again, it does create the atmosphere of the characters and their home.
I didn't see any mistakes so good job.
It's a little short, but I can't think of anything that would be good to add.
I use FaceBook so I had a clear image of what the post would have looked like.
I enjoyed it. Thanks!
Oops. Did you get my other review?
I raised the rating after I realized that I didn't see any mistakes. That's important for a piece that sort of breaks the rules a little.
Good job.
Haha cool. I think that anyone with half a brain feels that way. I bet that a lot of people won't appreciate the lack of paragraphs but you did name it 'Ramblings of a Madman' so that's what they get.
It might sound weird but I think you could actually make a short story out of it.
Maybe a guy wandering around his apartment going a little nuts. Maybe not though.
That's pretty short but it worked. Cynicism is a fun thing to tear down. I think it's a catchy bit of writing and would make a good start to a longer story.
Technically speaking I think that ' Couldn’t be more than twenty-three.' is an incomplete sentence, but it works with the driver's expressive line of thought. In that case I think it's okay to do that. The "correct' way would be to say 'He couldn't" but that's not the way someone would say it.
'The kid gave a beaming, though nervous, smile.' I don't think you need the commas but that's more of a point of style.
Poor kid though. For the story to go anywhere he's going to have to feel some pain.
Zing! I really like it!
I like aggressive male poetry. Chicks dig it too. One of my favorite sayings is, "Ask your little girlfriend how gay I am."
The haters know it too.
I like the scattered parentheses. I like the sense of defiance.
"Resistance is the secret of joy." The girl I lost my virginity to told me that Emily Dickinson said that.
She was older than me and studying to become an English teacher.
Now I feel like writing something ;)
No surprise there. I was diagnosed as bi-polar by a doctor who talked to me for about fifteen minutes. I think that psychologists are comfortable giving out any diagnosis that won't get them sued. Mental problems are pretty hard to bring up in court so they're pretty safe. They tried to give me Ritalin when I was seven, no joke.
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