I liked your story. It has a nice simplicity, uncluttered and able to breathe. I like the unusual twist of the ugly princess. You don't see that in most fairy tales. Not a bad job at all for a first run. Think long and hard about the follow up piece, and keep up the good work.
There is absolutely no denying that the points you make are true. As far as it goes, the content is excellent. However, there is one consideration that immediately arrested my attention. That consideration was the author of this piece. Of course, the natural assumption is that these points of communication are from the personal experience of the author. But the reader is never told as much. For all any decerning reader knows, it could have been copied from a book. While excellent in content, this piece is much too impersonal. The reader doesn't know whether you have written this or someone else has. Please share your voice. Let the reader hear from you and your experience with this subject. I hope you can derive some good from this sincere review.
I often jog on a track, Keaton, so running in circles is nothing new. Most people are like the cat chasing his tale. You did a good job putting it all in a certain perspective. My favorite line was. "These hands quite stained, this heart a roaring shame." Your piece was a nice change of pace.
Well done.
These words never fail to be true. Making the lives of others better is always a sure way to make your life more fulfilling. The examples you give are valuable self-help methods. Good ideas, all.
Well written account of the great spider incident. However, I am sorry that the spider died. I have always appreciated spiders. But, overall, well done
Nice work, Jim. The flow of this piece carried me right along. I wanted to know what happened next, even though the conclusion seemed inevitable. Clear and simple writing is always the best.
Great job.
Well, I can't say that I wanted to know what else happens at Bacall Conniff. However, having said that, this piece isn't meant to be a real page turner. Yet, If I was in search of an accounting firm I would certainly give Bacall Conniff a call.
You did a very nice job of describing the philosophy of this company. Although I know nothing of accounting, I would think that knowing the overall philosophy of such a company is somewhat more important than knowing the details of accounting.
Well done, Tom. It was just by chance that I eyed your piece...or was it? Whether by the fates or God directed, I loved it. I particularly love the Atheist alternatives. Great job. May the protection of Bastet be upon Dave and Molly.
Haven't been reviewing for some time, so you are the first.
I really liked the story. I found it concise and to the point with no superfluous content. It is written in a nice snappy style that gets the job done in a few words
Well, this piece is the cat's meow. I'm sorry, but I couldn't resist.
I loved this poem. It was very clever. Surely you must live with a cat, or should I say, be allowed to live with one.
This is one of the most delightful poems I have read in a while. Clever, witty, and insightful are just a few of the words that describe this piece. The form is great.
A very powerful piece that I had to read several times. This is what they call, making the reader do a little of the work. Some poems were meant to be given more than a cursory glance. True, true, true, all that you say within this work.
I might suggest a couple of punctuation marks here or there. Other than that I am pleased with what you have written.
Well, to say the least, I will never think of Santa the same way again. I still wondering, what the hell did I just read? They certainly don't write Christmas stories like they used to.
Kev, I'm almost speechless; here is an erotic Christmas story...or is it? Well, such is our world.
Aside from the use of the F-word being unnecessarily used, I think your writing is very well done. Your story is imaginative and clever. The story brings most readers where they wish to go, and they are not disappointed.
While this story isn't for everyone, it certainly would find its market in the after midnight crowd.
Clever story line.
Excellent writing.
Imaginative. =
WELL DONE
Well written, Pat. Do you ever feel the insatiable need to write, to communicate with someone, with no one? Just to allow the words their freedom is cathartic.
I'm sure my post sounded somewhat annoyed, but I totally agree that we shouldn't throw the baby out with the bath water. Thanks for your level-headed reply.
I found your essay quite interesting. Philosophy has always been one of my favorite disciplines. Now, before I get to your review, let me tell you a little about myself.
I have been an ordained minister for thirty years. I am now retired. In my years of seminary I studied theology, Greek, and Hebrew. I will admit to having no formal education outside of seminary training. However, being an academic at heart, I am what is generally called an autodidact. Study and writing has been the passion of my life.
Having bored you with all of that, I found your essay to be very educational - to me, that is. You immediately caught my attention with your inclusion of Viktor Frankl. I have intensely studied the Nazi regime for over two decades. When I discovered Frankl I was hooked, as I find his philosophy quite existential in nature. But that should not be considered unusual considering the phenomenal circumstances he experienced. I consider him quite amazing to have been able to analyze and codify his findings will having to deal with the horrors of the camps.
I don't like Marx or Freud. Descartes makes me wonder whether I am actually here or not, but I do like to read him. Marcus Aurelius is one of my favorites.
I really appreciate the way you systematically handled your subject matter. Did your professors like it? It was an excellent overview of the different and somewhat melding disciplines.
I enjoyed your writing very much. Well done, if that means much from an autodidact.
The perfect movie lover you are. Some have the ability to appreciate the big screen. You are one of those.
I did like this bit of free verse. Nothing is overdone, just plain and simple escapism. We all need that from time to time, a world that will not harm nor judge, just be there for us when we need it.
Well done! Yes, and most unfortunately, things are just the way you describe. I'm more interested in content than form. I never have gotten into the technical side of poetry.
This is a very nicely written story. As I have told others before, I am not much of a story reader - at least fiction. Your story, on the other hand had me from the start. Your ability to describe scenes is skillfully done. I love your description of the old man's lemon colored shirt. And the fact that you describe the feeling of wanting to help and not wanting to at the same time is well handled.
You did a great job here.
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