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Rated: E | (4.5)
Quite nice. Maybe you should change the end (as with all this, I send you love) to maybe "As with all this, I send you a lot of love"? It's just an idea since it's already good as it is, and it depends on the sort of rhyme, the pace in which it would be read (since I'm not that much of a poet). As I said, it's good, and mine was just a lousy idea. Sorry if it made you mad or something =l
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