The purpose of this review is to offer my opinion as one writer to another. As a writer, I understand how precious a piece of work can be to its creator, so my opinion comes with all the respect due to a fellow writer. I do not claim to be an expert nor do I assume to know better than anyone else what works and what doesn't. I offer my opinion as a means of supporting you in your writing journey. If you have any questions or comments regarding my review please feel free to email me. I hope you find something useful , and that you will discard the rest with good cheer.
Your final rating is based on the average of all the scores given throughout this review. I will give you a rating between 1 and 5 for the following categories.
1. CREATIVITY Score is based on average of the following four sub-categories (4.5/5)
PLOT(4.5/5)
You raise some interesting questions in this essay, which are put together in a creative and original way. The story line as such is not unique, but your raising of questions about other puzzling happenings in our world certainly makes the reader pose the relevant questions.
CHARACTERS(4.5/5)
While this is normally marked for characterization, I will use your use of different situations to pose your questions. In this, I feel you had a great variety of interesting facts that helped to make your essay intriguing. Your research was accurate and well put together.
SETTING AND DESCRIPTIONS(4.5/5)
Your descriptions were accurate and relevant and helped with the creation of your essay.
STYLE / POV / NARRATION / DIALOGUE(4.5/5)
I like your writing style, the very small amount of dialogue was appropriate for the story and it was written from the writer's own POV.
2. TECHNICAL(5/5)
Score is based on average of the following two sub-categories
STRUCTURE(5/5)
There was a clear beginning, middle and end of your essay. The structure consisted of small sentences and paragraphs which made for a very easy read.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION(5/5)
I did not come across any errors in spelling, punctuation or grammar. Your editing skills are excellent.
3. RECEPTION(4.5/5)
I really enjoyed this essay, it poses many questions, which I like, and because I have seen two 'ghosts' previously, I firmly believe that there are very strange things in the world which can not be explained.
FINAL RATING(4.5/5)
Score is based on the average of the three categories
Thanks for sharing this essay! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece. Please keep on writing more things just like this!!!
That is a lovely story, a beautiful inspiration from a lovely picture! The only thing I would 'complain' about, is the fact that I had to make up the surprise for myself; I would love to know what your surprise was. The piece was grammatically error free and I could see no spelling or punctuation errors. It was nicely laid out and very easy to read. Thank you for a great story.
This is an awesome story, sad, tragic, and educational and I admire your strength of character and the way you have portrayed both your father and mother, as well as yourself. your are correct, 'What if's..' have no place in this story, though the young adult you were would have believed that at the time. The story is very strongly written, concise and with alll the information that was needed. The grammar, punctuation and spelling wre all fine and I noticed no glaring omissions or errors. Your sentences and paragraphs were well set out and made for easy reading. Thank you for a great story that touched my heart. Well done.
It is certainly a shame that a little girl could miss out on recess and get into trouble for having a nightmare. I am very glad that Mr Thomas was not MY teacher! I think this is well written and takes and uses the prompts very well. I wonder why it is that as humans, we can feel guilt about the most innocent things that happen to us,although unwittingly. I presume that her nightmares are triggered by family violence in some form (yelling) and I think that pieces like this should be well promoted, so more people can understand what their behaviour can cause in young people. Well done, I think you have a lovely touch. Keep writing!
This is a good, succinct story, with an amusing, but dark ending. Revenge is an interesting topic to write about and I believe you have done it justice. The premise of how we would spend our last 24 hours is also most interesting, I think I would still be coming up with ideas with a minute to go! Lol. I enjoyed this story and look forward to reading more of your work.
I wish I had written this poem, it is very evocative and describes me and my life perfectly.
The poem flows quite nicely, although a couple of lines are a little too long (I blot out the bad things that people do). You could omit the 'that' to make it less lengthy and sound better. (Lets you ignore the things that you don't want to find). Again, you could omit 'the' and 'that' to make the line flow better. This is only my personal opinion, please do not be offended.
Overall, well done!
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, and that you will discard the rest with good cheer. 
