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Review by Emannep
Rated: E | (2.0)
After finishing your poem, try reading it aloud to hear how it flows. A good method to follow is to count the syllables. The line "Waiting for just the right car moving slower than the rest" for example is 14 syllables, I'm sure you could find another way of saying the same thing with less syllables or dividing it into two lines. Also watch your spelling and/or punctuation. For example I think you meant "carrying" in line two. Try seperating stanzas every fourth line and seperating ideas. Kind of like paragaraphs. Good luck!
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