Brian Parvum's (taterpig) Reviews

Brian Parvum

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#3900953

Review of Since You Left

Review by Brian Parvum

Rated: E

| (4.0)

This was very short, but also very touching and emotional. I may have misinterpreted the meaning here, but that's the way it goes, right?

I didn't care for the very first line and felt it was a bit flowery and unnecessary... not quite grounded in the reality of the rest of the poem. The line "my fingers still reach for your shoulders" gives a clue that whoever she/he is, they are gone.

The 2nd verse reinforces that hint and is very grounded and is something we can all relate to.

I especially enjoyed the 3rd verse. Again, I may misinterpret here, but it seems that the reflection that is mentioned hints that the writer was affected by this person enormously, almost to the point of emulation. Not simply pantomiming, but changing to become more like the missing partner.

Well done, and well written. I enjoyed this.

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#3390503

Review of Film

Review by Brian Parvum

Rated: E

| (4.5)

I like it!

I especially like the term "celluloid memories". It expresses completely that air of artificiality surrounding all home movies. No one acts the same when the camera is on and the memories are tainted....

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#3387281

Review of opportunity

Review by Brian Parvum

Rated: E

| (3.0)

Pros :
-I like the meaning, and I think this serves to reinforce a concept that all of us realize yet consistently fail to remember.
-I like the freeform style of the poem. I've never been a traditionalist and I find the innovation refreshing.

Cons :
-The grammar and misspellings make it a tough read, and are so blatant in places that the point can be missed.

Favorite Wording :
for they say opportunity knocks once at the door
and it is bizarre to be struck by lighting twice

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#3378865

Review of Hello Reader

Review by Brian Parvum

Rated: E

| (4.5)

I'm seriously impressed. This is the type of poetry I'd like to be able to put together.

Well done!

5

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#3378564

Review of Stand Up

Review by Brian Parvum

Rated: 13+

| (3.5)

Well said! I agree with the sentiment entirely, although I feel that most of the "abusers" you're referring to would never stop to question their own motives and actions. The human race is just... insensitive.

I like the tone and the format, but there are a few (minor) grammatical errors. All in all, I liked it!

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#3378562

Review of In the Bus

Review by Brian Parvum

Rated: E

| (4.0)

I liked it! I'm not well-versed enough to offer any tips for improvement, unfortunately. I think the phrase "looping in my mind" captures that feeling perfectly. Very well done!