I like your story..... you do a very good job describing real emotions. I like how you came back to the green grass at the end. Few minor writing errors.....she in she says should not be capitalized, and the third to last sentence I think you meant "of" instead of "it". Very nice short story!
Tamara
I really enjoyed your short story, it reminds me of a classic fairy tale. Love that Will's tendency to be lazy (seen as a short coming in humans), made him the perfect troll husband. Nice happily ever after, with him becoming a troll and living near but not to close to her parents. : ) Tamara
Your story definitely kept my attention. I anxiously read ahead to see what was going on. I will be interested to see where you go with this. Good job ! Tamara
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