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Rated: E | (3.5)
Do not mean to offend, this is simply my opinion.

This is pretty, but I'm not really feeling the depth. On the one hand, some of the picture you're painting here is clear, but other parts are too vague. I'm too busy trying to seek out meaning to really feel much as I read. I'm guessing it's about remembering the death of a child, but it feels like most of the emotion is being held at arm's length. The rest is too much of a puzzle for such a short piece, in my opinion. Too much poetry, not enough prose.
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