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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is as good as a poem gets with out being a masterpiece.
You set a common scene in your own beautiful words. Creatively.
This would be an excellent way to start a masterpiece.
The end is wicked but in my opinion shouldn't be the end, it should be the opening or closing of another piece, a story inside a story.
Or you could have had children down the beach throwing "Alka seltzer Tablets at the seagull , disappointed that the bird was occupied with the chips.
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