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Review of GOODBYE TO LOVE  
Review by Orion
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This was perfect, 6 months ago i felt like closing my heart off and never loving again
I love your vocabulary, it is specatcular splattered with vivid imagery and the whole piece flows wonderfully

Also you can feel the poem getting angrier as you enter the last verse it gives the feeling of you actually reading it and speaking the words

Well done
(One of my favourite poems ive read on here!)
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Review of Take me Away  
Review by Orion
Rated: E | (3.0)
This is average, a good attempt but linguilly speaking the vocabulary employed needs to be improved and expanded upon.

Try using a thesaurus to come up with a more intriguing set of voabulary that can invoke and express your emotion far more accuratly

You may also like to try writing in free verse, which removes the constraints of employing a rhyming pattern

Also this doesn't require an 18+ rating
(you will get more of an audience if it is not, and this piece contains no explicit language)

On the upside you have alot of potential, a very good emotional netting and a vivid imagination and a desire to express yourself

Good luck with your writing and please keep in contact and feel free to message me for any help

All the best

Orion (Matt)
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