Hello,
This is a really good poem. I am a fan of dark stories and poems, and I may not be a poet nor a poetry expert... I know that this is good because this poem made me feel and despite the computer screen I felt as if I was there at the moment the knife plunged into her.
Her kiss a bite,
Her caress a stinging slap,
Her embrace a shove to the ground.
She is longing for the love that she will never receive and the imagery here is effective.
You showed what happened and did not tell the story to the reader.
The light cuts out. The light cuts out.
This line gave me the chills.
Amazing. I almost had tears in my eyes, you offered a glimpse into another person's grief and a glimpse was enough to change my outlook in life (although, it will be temporary as always does the stubborn human). Well written, although the end lacked as much emotion as I needed it to be. Still, one of the best stories I've read here.
I am not an expert in the field of poetry and I am not one to appreciate poetry easily.
This poem though, I found this good and I really liked it. "God please, stay right here, do not disappear", that line just went through my chest and right into my heart. Have you ever felt that way? Well I did when I read this. I love it.
All throughout his career, even up to the present, King inspires many readers to pursue writing. If given the chance to personally thank him, I will. He has not only affected the Horror industry greatly but even people's hearts and souls. His version of horror makes the reader feel for the character; a reader may laugh or cry along with the characters and that is one of the greatest achievements of a writer. To make the reader feel and I think that King definitely got that part right.
That was very brilliant! Amazing piece of work. At first, the title drew me in until I found myself trapped inside the story. I felt like an observer instead of a reader. The story was very inspiring and you made me glad that I got a septum piercing because as you have said, "If you’re dying to do something, do it before you’re dying." That was just genius, I really loved it.
True. This is an accurate description of communication. I am an AB Communication student, planning on taking up Media Production so I can understand what the "double-edged blade" meant. What you communicate to another person is only how the receiver interprets it.
Good day to you. I am not an expert in critiquing poems but it would have been better if you corrected the typographical errors found within the poem. It had a nice hopeful beginning but it had a nice morbid ending which was executed well. The last line seemed to speak out to me in a cold whisper.
That was a good poem. I liked it even though the font made it a bit hard to read, or did you do that on purpose, as a symbolism to the sublime yellow house itself? That was genius.
"I think your occupants might be gay, but that's okay." That line had me hooked. Please keep writing more. I loved it.
That was a great twist. I didn't see that coming. The story was well written and the plot was great. It was a story with 498 words but I felt my heart race against my chest as the climax went on. It was very unpredictable. Awesome, keep up the good work.
The story was very well-written, there is a quick build-up of the story that doesn't make the reader want to stop reading it due to impatience. The imagery used was effective. It can be appreciated by both adult readers and children alike. The ending was inspirational and appropriate.
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