Interesting poll. Usually I don't choose in the highest statistic, but this time I did. I have been to all of these places. You chose well in deciding which cities. This is a poll that is relevant, and the number of people that have taken it proves that. You just need to fix the title - it should read "Nicest"
Hi, It's me again. I'll have to try one of these 55-word stories. Did Pliny really say that? lol Things have not ever changed. Probably cavemen complained of the same thing. I have enjoyed my romp through your portfolio. You are a talented writer.
What a fun story. Like I said before, I'm a fan of science fiction and I really like your style. There were a couple of typos, a "t" was missing from "the" in the last paragraph of the first section. "Wei" is spelled "Oui" according to my sources. I could be wrong. Those were very inconsequential errors and did not take away from a fun read.
I am a fan of sci fi and I like your style. I'm interested in the scientific aspect of sci fi, so your short story was right up my alley. The only place that I stumbled on was the next to last paragraph. I had to read it a few times, but I eventually figured it out! You are a very good writer and I would like to continue reading in this series.
What a great story!. I really enjoyed the twist at the end. The unappreciative child did not get what he wanted even though he had the chance. I'm sure there were inappropriate graphics to make his parents not get it for him for his birthday. I have an 11-year-old boy that lives for wii, ipod touch, and nintendo DS games. I should buy HIM a scooter for his birthday.
Hi, I'm Timi and I'm reviewing your writing for the Reviewers Club of The Writing Academy. This was a very interesting piece. I can only imagine what the prompt was. I got chills reading about the killer tule fog. There was a conflict of emotions for me as I read of killer fog and cute little chippies. I like your imagery and your "folksy" way of telling about the natural history of California.
Wow, this is a very intense story. I am assuming this is true and if so, I would like to thank you for serving our country in combat. The horrors of Vietnam are never to be forgotten, so it is important for veterans to write them down and hopefully provide a bit of relief from the trauma. The only errors I noted in this story was the capitalization of several words, particularly "I". You might want to go back over the story just to catch a few spelling errors such as "Alaph", I'm guessing that you meant "Alpha" and "bomds", should be "bombs".
This is a great take on the prompt. You worked the items in so well that I had to check to see what the prompt was. You have a good imagination and the imagery was strong. You must have a background in Civil War history, because it seemed so believable. Good luck with the contest.
As always, a very clever story from Hyperiongate! This is a well-deserved win. You write very well and I always look forward to your flash fictions. I don't see any errors. I loved the description of Tony. The wheeling and dealing was a hoot. You can put a lot into 299 words.
This is a great take on this prompt. I loved the humor and could just picture Erica, like a Paris Hilton type. The names you came up with added to the humor. You write very well and I look forward to reading more of your writing. I did not catch any grammar or punctuation errors.
I really liked this story. It captured the surroundings of the couple very well. What we sometimes deal with to be supportive of our loved ones. I could pick up on the personalities in just 300 words. I could see Sara trudging back to the road, miserable and then Ted proposing. Some people have "great" timing. I look forward to reading more from you.
Hi, I'm Timi and I'm reviewing as a Pep Squad Member for the Writer's Academy. I like the chill and the thrill of this short. It sounds like the beginning of a good story. I've written Flash Fictions and I know how difficult it is to stay under the 300 word limit, yet have a decent finish to the story. You played it nicely. I liked how the beginning of the race was the end of the story, like a prologue. I look forward to reading more.
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Hi, I'm Timi and I'm on the pep squad with the Writer's Academy. I must say that after reading this unbearably sad story, I am anything but peppy. In fact, you reduced me to tears. You write very beautifully. It's amazing how many songs you were able to pack into this heartbreaking tale. I can understand why you won for this. I could tell you worked hard on it.
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I thought this was a very good poem. It flowed and I liked the rhyming. For a sophomore in high school you do write well. You stuck to the theme and I saw no flaws in the punctuation. I hope you continue your writing and pursue publication. WDC is a great community for young writers. There are even groups within WDC just for writers under 25. Good luck!
I enjoyed this cute story. I love flash fiction and your writing reminds me of my own. There was one spot that did not flow: "So when is the deadline?" he asked, really meaning . . . . . "; maybe adding "would" after "when" might make it easier to read. That was only one spot and it is only my amateur opinion. Good writing!
Very nice! I have two little rescues and I'm the one that feels lucky. I can't imagine life without the little critters. You write very well. I enjoyed how you made the story from the perspective of the cat, though it took me a second or so to figure out that "Dad" wasn't a cat as well. Fun read and I look forward to more.
This is a beautiful poem. It flowed nicely and the message was strong. I liked the imagery and how the words "gleefully" and "giggling" evoked the sound of a mountain stream. You are a talented poet. I do not write poetry, but I enjoyed yours very much.
This is a nice, flowing poem. I am not a poet, nor do I claim to know much about poetry, but I did enjoy reading this. My only question is: Did you mean "bloog from the deepest depths" or "blood from the deepest depths"? It is a good poem and I hope you write more.
This is a very unique piece of work. I enjoyed how you placed music with it. It had this comic book superhero quality to it. I could envision this set to the music and the action playing out. The only advice, mind you I am an amateur, is to watch your tenses. In the first paragraph you went from past to present. In the paragraph that starts "When the world gets in my face" , "form" should be "from". All in all, this is a fun read. Good luck!
Very vivid story. I felt it all flow smoothly until the end. Did the mother have something to do with the crime? Or was her suicide totally unrelated? You are a good writer. I enjoyed the dialogue and felt that Gilbert was indeed 10 years old. Peace and Write On!
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I loved it. Excellent nonsense verse. Reminded me of Lewis Carroll's "Jabberwocky" - "All mimsy were the borogroves . . . . "
The rhyming and rhythm were great. For nonsense, it was surprisingly understandable. I look forward to more. Thank you.
Very good piece. In 293 words you were able to construct a very plausible and comical scenario. I look forward to reading more and learning from you. Thank you
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