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Review of The Fun House  
Review by TKarma
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a great story. Kept me interested and wanting more.
The picture is a great start , as was the first paragraph which set me up for wanting to read further.
The dialogue kept the piece moving as it is suppossed to do. Nicw work there.
I also like the "Un House" which conjures all kinds of things in the imagination.
Then-"Did you feel that?"
"Did you feel something?"
DRac pops up but there's no power-uh oh.
Becky screams, "Somethings got my hair"
Air turns cold-sure sign of ghostly beings in supernatural stories-Yikes!
He runs, leaving his friends and they are never found. Wait-I thought they would be found-unexpected. Wonderful.
If you tell, you'll go to hell.
Can't get a better ending.
I want more!!!
TinaB60
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