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Review by TM Jaffray
Rated: E | (2.0)
I liked the premise over all, yet wanted to see dialogue. Too much narrative makes for for a dull read. Need to draw people in by letting the reader know what's going on inside the characters minds and build drama by having them talk things out. All that being said I really do like the character of William, a very intriguing boy.
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