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Review of Gray House  
Review by Terri M. Asa
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I don't quite know what to say.
Firstly, you're 'voice' is just brilliant. Realistic, clear and believable. You had me hooked from the very first paragraph, even if I wasn't completely sure just what it was that I was getting myself into . I love how you make your reader's feel something for and with the character. I know I've got the feeling of 'writer's block' engraved in my head, so to read about a character going through the same thing, something many authors know and hate with a fervent passion, was really nice. Great, really. I love that this whole scenario came out of him having a writer's block, even though it was a bit of an extreme case.
I love your mystery caller. He was calm and creepy and so so so MYSTERIOUS. I love the way Aaron finds himself believing the man had called him first, and not the other way around.
"As much as the view from his study's picture window was good, this was even better. That sudden beauty hit you like a sucker punch to the stomach. Even so, these mountains, with their immovable mass and unyielding attitudes—they were almost alien. Up close, that dominating presence seemed to magnify the diminutiveness of his faltering efforts. He hated to admit it, but in a contradictory sense it felt better to view them from a distance." I love this part. The description and the feeling it evokes is just peachy. Very well done.

As far as I've read, up to the point where he rushes abut the house, locks himself in the small, plain white room (why does he have that?) and then leaves, this story is brilliant. I've bookmarked it to finish reading when I get back, but I have to go out with my sister. I'm sorry I can't comment on things like sentence structure and word usage style and all that, I just think the thing is brilliant. I haven't seen a need to change anything. That may be because I'm not so much of a editor as a writer/reader, but I hope this review helped. Even if it just made you feel good about what you wrote. I like those kinds of reviews, and I appreciate them just as much as a constructive one pointing out how I can improve. But now I'm just rambling......... THIS IS AWESOME.
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