I loved this story! I was concerned in the beginning for Noble, he seemed entirely to cynical for a young man with his whole life ahead of him. I thought it was rather clever that Emily had set Noble up from the beginning so he would have to confess. However, I do wish that James could have been alive a little while longer.
I thought the first two chapters where a fair introduction however, I was a bit confused on the matter of Akia. The character change was a bit too sudden. The part about anger, hatred, and hurt was a very neat topic, it actually forced my brain to step back and re-process the story. I eagerly set off in search or waiting for more of your work.
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