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Review by jessicav
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
That was a great plot twist at the end! I got a great sense of Jordan's sense of paranoia as she she walked toward Port Authority.

There were a few typos, which kind of broke up the pacing a bit for me. I think that a little more emotion from Jordan, maybe a little more backstory about her relationship with her mother or her father would help this a little more. On the whole, though, I think this was a very interesting story and I'd be interested in knowing more!
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