Bleeding Dawn Reviews For Shadows and Light A Contest
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Please Note, all my reviews are what I think, and are meant to be helpful. Take Form them what you well and leave the rest. Now Good Luck in the Contest, and I thank you for your entry and your interest in my Contest. Anywho, On To the Review.
What I Liked: What a Truely wonderful piece, giving life to the fears of reality, some never see the truth of what your pieces gives life to. Bueatifully Written and truely meaingful.
What I Think Needs Work or Changing: Nothing it was a great piece, for which I saw no problems. Wonderful.
Over All Thought: This is a wonderful piece, your words flow with a truthful meaning. Both Powerful, and loving. Great Work. Again Thanks for your entry, and Good Luck.
Til We Meet Again, Blessed Be.
Bleeding Dawn.
May the Lady watch over you and yours. Merry meet, Merry part, and Merry meet again.
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What I Liked: This is a lovely piece, the words flow wonderfully, and the meaning is set in such a sweet tune it makes it so, what the word, UMMMMM, I can't think of it, but it that word if I every think of it. But Anywho, this is a bueatiful piece. Truely written form the auther's heart, you can hear her in the words as they flow. Wonderful.
What I Think Needs Work or Changed: Nothing form what I saw needed ether. But then agian I'm not the best to ask on that one. But from what I saw it was great.
Over All Thought: This is a wonderful peom bueatiful work, and a lovely tune dancing off the page. Wonderful.
May the Lady watch over you and yours. Merry meet, Merry part, and Merry meet again.
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So Here Some More Reviews. Addison, I hope there Helpful, and I hope you like writing them as much as I have reading them. But, anywho, on to the review.
What I LIked: AWWW, This is so cute. I love the meaning, it sweet regretful tone plays in the flow of the words in a wonderful medoly of love forever know. Truely beautiful piece.
What I Think Needs Work, or Changed: Not Much, just one little problem. In line 7 you have "but all i could feel was you tears, " I think You Mean, "But all I Could Feel Was Your Tears," I think that what you meant. Anywho, thats all I saw Hone, You have some very beautiful pieces that I have enjoyed reading.
Over All Thought: This is a beautiful, loving and sweet piece. With just the right amont of regret and pain mixed in the words to draw the reader into the pain of a love lost. Wonderful Piece. Keep Writing Always. Til Next We Meet, Blessed Be.
May the Lady watch over you and yours. Merry meet, Merry part, and Merry meet again.
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Hey, It me, Since You Were so Nice and Reviewed Me I Thought I stop by and Take a Look See. I have To Tell You I am Not Disappont At all, But anywho, On To the Review.
What I Liked. This is a Beautiful piece, with a very lovely Meaning. Your Words Flow, Wonderfully, with the beautiful meaning. Dreams, are a thing of life, and of worlds unseen, giving them life in life is taking away form there wonder. You Did a Great Job in showing that in this piece. Truely Beautiful.
What I Think Needs Work, or Changed: Nothing this is a very lovely piece. you didn't have any mistakes from what I saw, and the flow and from are great. Good Work.
Over All Thought: This is a Wonderful Poem. Great Work. I Be Reading More Soon, Keep Writing, Always. Til Next We Meet, Blessed Be.
May the Lady watch over you and yours. Merry meet, Merry part, and Merry meet again.
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Hey, First Off, Thank You For Your Entry In My Contest. I hope You enjoyed writing this piece as much as I enjoyed reading it. With That Said, Good Luck, and On To the Review.
What I Liked: I like the form, the flow, and the meaning of the piece. Regret is a strange thing, and can cause one's life to change. So You did a great job on using the prompt to show Regret. Also it a powerfully dark piece, added to the meaning, Great Work.
What I Think Needs Work, or Changed: Nothing, I saw no mistakes in the piece, and the flow, and form are fine. So Good Work.
Over All Thought: This is a powerful dark piece, with a regretful meaning, with in turn gives a add power to the piece. Great Work, and Good Luck. Keep Writing, Always. Til Next We Meet, Blessed Be.
May the Lady watch over you and yours. Merry meet, Merry part, and Merry meet again.
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Hey, First Off, Thanks For Your Entry in My Contest. I hope You had as much fun Writing this piece, as I did reading it. That Said, Good Luck, and On To the Review.
What I Liked: Well, I like the meaning, and how you used the prompt when useing a image, that is very creative. The Piece flows well, with a great form. Great Work.
What I Think Needs Work, or Changed: Nothing I saw need work, or to be changed. Great Job.
Over All Thought: This is a Hopeful piece with a beautiful meaning. You used the prompt wonderfully. With a creative point to it as well. Great Work, and Good Luck. Keep Writing, Always. Til Next We Meet, Blessed Be.
May the Lady watch over you and yours. Merry meet, Merry part, and Merry meet again.
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Hey, First Off, Thank You For Your Entry in My Contest. I hope you enjoyed writing this piece as much as I enjoyed reading it. So Good Luck, and on To the Review.
What I Liked: Well, This is a Dark, yet beautifully written Piece. I like the meaning, the flow, and the view of the poem. It is wonderful written, the words have a seeming of being made just for this piece, and you've written it greatly. You used the prompt just I as would have to tell you the truth. Truely Wonderful Piece.
What I Think Should Be Changed: Nothing, this is a great piece, in which I saw no mistakes.
Over All Thought: I Think is a great piece. Keep Writing, Always. Til Next We Meet, Blessed Be.
May the Lady watch over you and yours. Merry meet, Merry part, and Merry meet again.
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This poem is very good. I did enjoy it, but you words they can be impoved. You need stronger emotion behind the words you use. LIke lets say on this part:
I know I can LOVE, but I cannot feel it.
I feel pain when I see you, physical pain.
The pain that lets you know your heart is breaking,
And yet is doesn’t break
I can never love, yet I love you.
Love in a word, I know it's there
But that feeling is taken from me at your lose
My heart is breaking at the sight of your happiness
That happiness I shall never know, as my breaking heart
That as it seems won't break, because I know you have Love the thing I long for....
But well never have for I am to cold to feel.
This is just my point of view on the poem I think if you show that you great writing skill, and I hope I was of some help to you. I did really enjoy this read, I hope you never stop writing. May the lady watch over you and yours.
Merry meet, Merry part, and Merry meet again. May the Lady watch over you and yours.
Well, it has a great meaning. I do very much enjoy that, the poem itself need work. Well alot work. What I mean is poems have more then meaning behind the words. To have a good poem you most have for one a reason, and a want to write it. If you look at this you'll see that behind the words there's not much there, and you don't cut thoughts off. A poem can be as long as you wish it to be, so don't see that as a problem. There is alot that can make this poem better for example:
a common man treasures his wife
fathers a child
a common man loves a child
spawns a family
a common man protects a family
good line, but with different words can be improved, like
a common man sees a treasure in the mother, the wife, the woman of his heart,
A common man, fathers heavens gift of his child,
a common man loves his gift, his little angel
A common man spawns a family, spawns a world of his own
A common man protects his family, protects his world.
When writing, use your words with great care. Look at what here as just, well pointer you can keep the poem the same or change it. Thanks for sharing, and I hope this help you understand what poems can be and what they are. May the lady watch over you and yours. Blessed be.
Merry meet, merry part, and merry meet again.
P.S. Great add in the campfire. Also if something is spelled wrong sorry.
Well, very well writen, I do like the way you show that your lost, hinden or hinding, and breaking with so little words. But those words tall a great story, there are however a few mistakes like for example in line 7 you have cant you need can'. But other then that I didn't see many other, I think if you reread it though you find ways to add to the great tale. May the lady watch over you and yours.
This is so real to me, I went though the same thing, the pain is so unreal you lost yourself in it sometime. You show your pain in a loveing tale of life at it's best, then as you put it
"As time’s ugly hand gripped ever tighter" Time pulled away someone very important to you, you have my hopes for your healing. May the lady watch over you and yours.
Very well writen. Your words roll off the page, but you do need to go back and make the I's caped, and I think if you used more meaningful words you find the poem to have more behind it. I do believe that heart break is just that being broken, but being broken doesn't last for even. May the lady watch over you and yours, and may she help you though your pain.
Yet again you show the words more meaning then they would have had on their own. The tale is very well writen, I love how you show that this thing this addtion is a moster, that killing your life. However do believe if you made it a little more clear in the being as to what you fighting, or so on, that it would be easier to read, and would add to the flow of the poem. Thanks for the great Read. May the lady watch over you and yours. Don't stop writing.
Great poem. I love the meaning. You use your words in a great way, and choose the words that can have more than one meaning. Lovely poem, Thanks for sharing. Don't stop writing. May the lady watch over you and yours.
Merry meet, merry part, and merry mee again.
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