Wow! I am in all honesty impressed! This is one of those stories I can hardly find faults in, just a few grammar errors, like capitalizing the d in dad, typically it is, but Mom and Dad are tricky words, they are only capitalized in certain cases. I won`t go into detail, in fear of sounding like my teacher.
Another thing, this story felt REAL, the two boys were exact opposites, but best friends, it MADE sense! Because face it, if the 2 characters are the exact same, it is BOOORING!
Kudos, and adios, Among-the-Moon-and-Stars
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