I really like the way the story develops, and the characters are deep and not empty and that is very hard to do in a short story. The One thing I did notice is some of the words in it which I would call Thesaurus words they were misplaced when you could have used a smaller word that would mean the same thing, it is defiantly good to have a good selection of words in a story, but in my opinion a short story does not need these as its not long enough to constantly repeat these words. Overall I loved the story, It made me chuckle and that’s not easy to do. Also it is something that many people can identify with, I’ve done the same played with a pipe caused a disaster! And it was perfect length just long enough to get the story, not to long as to become dragged out for a short. The change of views from the women to men was little more like a cliff then a smooth change over, but it worked out in the end.
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