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Review of Fallen  
Review by SamK
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was extremely beautiful. No other way to put it.
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Review of The Reason  
Review by SamK
Rated: E | (3.5)
I loved your piece overall. Although I thought there were some lines that didn't make sense to me like:
"I want to be the cause of the
face he's holding still.

I want to be the cause of the
calm after the storm."

But this is just my opinion. Otherwise a truly lovely poem on love.
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Review of What If  
Review by SamK
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
The song has very deep emotion to it. Like you wish to erase the past and make everything alright. You wish that people had no pretence.

Its a perfect song except for the line "because "what if" doesn't answer anything"
I felt it didn't fit in too well.

This is just my opnion. Hope it helped you.
Keep writing!
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Review of Search  
Review by SamK
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I feel maybe you should work on the rhyme a bit more. But, I like the emotion the poem exhibits overall. Also, I appreciate how you took the time to recognise the 'hate'. We never really consider that the hate we feel could actually be directed towards ourselves. We always end up forcing it onto another.
Like I said, love the overall emotion. :)
hope this helps.
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Review of Butterflies Die  
Review by SamK
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
beautifully written and extremely well structured song! I loved every word of it.
Its heart aching to watch innocence demise. And also very sad to have to give it up so that we are no longer perceived 'weak'.
I especially love how you conveyed something so deep so simply.
Keep writing :)

SamK.
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Review of The Poetry Room  
Review by SamK
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very and extremely interesting. You choice of words and the way its been written, very creative! keep sharing!
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Review by SamK
Rated: E | (4.0)
A very well written story in the form of a poem. Love the flow and the rhyme and ofcourse, not to mention the moral! Fabulously written. A tale well told.
Everything is evened out and easy to understand. Very to-the-point which I think is a good thing rather than dragging on. The poem even though long does not get boring.
Great piece. :)
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Review of Remember  
Review by SamK
Rated: E | (3.5)
I love the simplicity in your poem. Its strucuture, the words used, everything is very simple and therefore easy to understand and relate to. No complications which reflect that there were very little complications in the relationship as well. Very heart touching and moving poem. Which all relations were this easy.
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Review of The sands of time  
Review by SamK
Rated: E | (5.0)
I think this is a brilliant poem. I love every word of it.
I can relate to this poem a lot and maybe thats why it means so many things to me.
When we move on to new phases of life, we move with no strings attached. All the ones we know slowly start to fade away. I've lost many dear friends the same way.
Great stuff!
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Review by SamK
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hey, I'm new here. This is actually just my opinion so hope you don't mind.

I love the way the poem starts, specially the lines :'...my heart might freeze over
Then shatter, be gone'
and how it picks up pace after: 'HAHA! NO CHANCE'.

But at the same time, it looses its focus after it. Sounds like its part of another poem.
Also, I feel your poem is too long. You need to shorten it.

Hope this helps.
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Review of Ode to Shore  
Review by SamK
Rated: E | (3.5)
I think its absolutely beautiful! :)
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