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Review of Streams of Sand  
Review by Vern
Rated: ASR | (2.0)
I like "the streams of sand" concept pertaining to losing an opportunity at love, but the concept wasn't developed as well as it could have been. The lack of punctuation combined with the flow of the poem made it somewhat difficult to follow. Ensuring that you have used punctuation correctly, and ensuring that your words are spelled correctly is part of editing process which you will find helps to improve your writing skills. The poem started off strongly, and the emotion is there so work on tightening it up and making sure that the sentiments you are trying to express remain connected.
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