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Review of Nine One One?  
Review by RANTING ROSS
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I liked the self-contained plot although, unlike most of the pieces I browsed today, I actually wanted more detail.
I assume this story was designed to be both compact and complete but more character detail could have brought the scene out further. For example you could have drawn the quandry over calling the police or not out more or possibly heightened the perils of getting involved. You could have explored the repercussions of involving yourself in somebody else's plight to enhance the situation and broadened the deliberation over the backlash to both her business and Samantha's poliitcal aspirations.
I enjoyed the one-sided phone conversation as we don't need to hear Mr Stacker's comments and although I generally prefer compact writing over fluffed out rubbish, I would have enjoyed more.
Cheers!
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