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Review by StoneHeart
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very well done, I enjoyed that.
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Review of Complex Numbers  
for entry "Almost Done" 
Review by StoneHeart
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Long flights, in that I can fully relate. Living in New Zealand we are a long way away from the rest of the world...Like seriously. I don't count Australia they are just New Zelanders with worse accents and dangerous wildlife *Smile*
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Review of Writing Blog  
Review by StoneHeart
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Without writing I would likely go insane... Keeps me on the level I guess.
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Review of Writing Blog  
for entry "20231122 NaNo XXV" 
Review by StoneHeart
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Great advice Steven, absolutely following it. As much as I love my babies they need to be read by others, and what I have created bits may not make sense so... beta read to improve the work.
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Review by StoneHeart
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading this, you have quite the knack of writing touching prose, and topical subject... I fear humanity will never learn.
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Review by StoneHeart
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Oh the inuendo in that was simply glorious, thanks for posting Dave, it gave me a good laugh for the morning.
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Review of Writing Blog  
for entry "20231108 NaNo VIII" 
Review by StoneHeart
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Fry to death on the end of the phone... Brutal
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Review of Gaia  
Review by StoneHeart
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Lots of very good descriptive features present in your work. I enjoyed reading it and the journey you took me through. From a writing perspective I would go through and check for places where comma use would be appropriate, I tend not to overuse and, in a sentence. Also watch for general overuse of others such as 'of.'

Generally, I do not have much more feedback than that. Like I said I enjoyed the journey through the wilderness with you.
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Review by StoneHeart
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That hit me, well done. Not sure what else to write here other than keep it up that was really very good.
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Review of Torment  
Review by StoneHeart
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very dark and highly descriptive work, I am a fan of dark fiction so to me this feels comfortable... R Scott Bakker vibes in parts. The work gives me a sense of dislocation, isolation and certainly despair, however I do feel a little lost. Now I expect that is intentional, helping to heighten the feeling of loss and despair. Is she actually experiencing this or is it all a dream... This has me wondering and frankly looking forward to reading more, and in that we have the main goal of a writer achieved to make the reader want more.

I will say that this work will not be for everyone, most will say it is far to abstract and leave the reader feeling isolated and slightly confused. That makes me different, I don't mind that, I like the mystery and the feeling of utter despair your character is experiencing. Having said that if you are wanting a bit more of a mainstream appeal I would give the reader a bit more context in that case.
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for entry "Closed Door" 
Review by StoneHeart
Rated: E | (5.0)
I can relate to that, reminds me of my life and how I feel like I stumble down a dusty track while others walk a paved road.
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Review by StoneHeart
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wonderful short story that reminds me of a very dangerous night drive over the pass through to Queens town here in New Zealand.. snow and fog and a crazy truck driver are not a good mix.
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