This poem definitely shows some hurt back in your past and the way you broke up the line structure was brilliant. The poem is definitely well written and I loved how you referred to blood as sap. Brilliant job and keep up the good work for sure.
This piece is incredibly sad but I find it somehow amazing that at the end you wish her the best and forgive her. Love hurts deeply when its lost or unrequited and it takes a lot of strength to forgive and wish her to best. Amazing poem and keep up the great work.
Wow that is definitely a deep short story. I can totally relate to it as well and the reader can feel the emotion easily through your choice of words and punctuation. Great work and keep it up.
Wow, that was definitely a great poem. It was very smooth and you kept the rhyme as well, which I would say is very impressive.
The thing I really enjoyed about this poem is that it seems like you actually have been in this situation and the feelings and everything are there. You make the poem real and come to life almost. Also I think anyone who was been in love with someone that did not feel the same would really appreciate this poem and know they aren't alone...
But hey great job :)
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