Great use of emotional content and description without making your short story mushy or sappy. Mark showing up although he had no word from her took a lot of love as a man would always fear looking the fool through rejection. Revealing at the end that Father Patrick knows a bit of what they are going through explains why the Priest is supporting. Nice Job.
Totally Hot! I have always thought Abby and Gibbs were an item. You did a graet job with the emotions between these two. You hit Gibbs on the head and most men for that matter as we feel responsible for our women and dont take kindly to any one hurting them. I am going to bet that guy is dead by now.
I like the black and white image. She reminds me of Abby Sciuto on NCIS with the striped stockings. The pensive face, however reminds me very of the owner of this portfolio. So sad and So beautiful all at once. Nice job, brat. Keep up the good work.
Impressive looking contest. I don't do much writing myself but Horror is one of my favorite genres for reading and movies. You have offered up a generous display of awards and GPs for your contest and I hope that you are rewarded with a crap load of good reading material.
It is refreshing to see a Dom/sub relationship portrayed positively in a fictional story.
The call to a sister submissive is well done and realistic. It is good that girls in the lifestyle share experiences good and bad with their sisters.
The playfulness erin displays in this chapter shows a girl growing comfortable with her Master but even more so with her own feelings of submission. I liked the play. Submissive does not mean meek or weak. A true Dom does not need a fall on the floor girl to make them feel a man.
Ean is a smart man not to diddle the granddaughter. The old saying is don't s*** where you sleep.
Liked the urban campfire. Good to see them is a different setting. Not all of a Dom/sub relationship is hot sex or discipline. Great work so far.
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