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Review of The Face  
Review by WriteDad
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
I think you have the makings of a great story here. I find myself wanting to know more about "the face". Is it someone from your past? What does it look like? Why does it invoke fear? More description will help greatly. You write, "Ridley begins to fear the worst.". As a reader I want to know what the worst is. There are a few grammatical glitches where things aren't smooth but they are few and don't take away from the story.
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