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Review of Rock Bottom  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Awww, very cool. At the beginning, I was sure it was going to be a sad story, but now it's a happy story and I love it! *Smile*

Just a few things:

'...You have the power, Koby, to set things right again.'

Missed the " at the end of the sentence.

'“You say you have five crews now?” Koby asked in disbelief.”'

Don't need the " at the end of the sentence.

'“Ok, this crew is presently working on the inside of an office buildning downtown.'

Building instead of buildning.

Anyway, great job and keep on writing!



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