First of all, this had me leaning closer and closer to my screen, trying to read faster to see what would happen, wanting to know why Myra was calling again after ten years, and why she called Ru back so late...
But before that came the dull ache in my own chest, echoing my own heart-break. I think you managed to capture grief really well; because grief doesn't only apply when someone has passed, but when you've lost them in other ways.
being a song writer myself, I have respect for lyrics like these alone, but when read with more insight, they prove to be very deep. personally, i couldn't write something like this, as i write rock/pop anyway, but this...this is awesome. i really liked it, and i shall listen to it and let you know what i think when i find my head phones... =s i really like the lyrics though...write on!
the intro of this really got to me...kind of made my bones tingle, you know? So I had to keep reading and...wow. My nan is from ireland so i'm going to send this link to her...i think it's really her thing. It's far from my usual prefernces, but it's greatly loved all the same! write on!
i love...no, i <i>adore</i> haikus. I can never quite spell it though, so well done for that alone! I can never write them either...I think it's quite a mean feat to write a decent haiku...a mean feat, that you have acheived with utmost credibility. Write on!
wow! as soon as i get back from the break i am going on tomorrow, i will log onto myspace and read your novella! it sounds so gripping and this is a great hook! I cant wait to read it but i do not have enough time at this moment in time...but i can assure you that this is fantastic work and i love it! write on!
well...erm...I don't really know what to say about this. I liked it, but in a weird sort of way. I have an irrational fear of chain - saw's, so that in it's self kind of worried me, but I really liked the story line. I just can not think of the right words to describe it...sorry. But i loved it. going to read your other things now :)
i loved this but...it was rather short...was it just an intro? I didn't fully understand it, but i loved it all the same. how was it set in the 60's? Hmm...I think it would use a little work but it has massive potential. It reminded me of Grease or another movie like that.
WOW HOW much does this relate to me!? Really, it is a really good poem and i think a lot of people will read it and say "YEAH!" I'm going to go and read your other things now because I really like your style. By the way, what made you choose green for a font colour? Was it any particular reason or just random?
i really really like this poem...it made me think carefully. After reading it I pulled a mittor out of my bag and looked carefully, and realised a lot of things I need to say to people. I found it flowed really well and I liked the structure. I would change the last line, as I thought it changed style compared to the rest rather suddenly, but hey, if that's what you like then bravo!
i read this and couldn't get it out of my head...i just needed to say something....it was so sad, it made me cry...but it was really good...it was perfect, infact!
this strongly reminded me of paris hiltons attitude. i loved it! it represents in my opinion anyway the attitude of girls today. its really godd...i love it!
i really liked this...I really feel the person in the poems emotions. However, i noticed your use of the word "your" but in the sense you used it, it should have been "you're", short for "you are". But apart from that it was really good!
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