I liked the oddness of this story. It was fairly well written with very little for me to comment on. I would try to use more descriptive words in place of creature, its instead of it's, some hyphens were missing Razor-sharp, but generally a great read. Thank you for posting
Writing is a great way to express our feelings. Especially in poems. Many people struggle with the feelings you talk about here, and this also lets them know they are not alone. I'm not sure what I could comment on here that would be of help to you writing wise. Just one line I stumbled over:
"When all I want to do more than anything I smile"
Did you men to say When all I want to do more than anything IS smile?
Beautiful! This mirrors the relationship I have with a friend from high school. Very nicely written,although a short story, I could see this becoming a novella at the very least. Expanding possibly to old adventures or maybe new ones! You write in a way that keeps people reading, wanting more. Good job.
How sad, but thank you for sharing. I have four cats at the moment but many have walked in my heart. I feel the pain of losing a friend, it comes through very well in this piece. You write from the heart and your words describe very nicely the power of your emotions.
I really enjoyed this! You did a marvelous job making the farm animals come to life. The actual story was really cute and worthy of story time with my grandson. It taught a harsh lesson, but in an entertaining way. Good job.
Oh, I absolutely loved this. Being a pet lover it was easy for me to feel what Vince was going through. You write very well, it flows perfectly. You were able to express the hopelessness of his situation and his struggle to maintain his sanity in such a hostile place. Thank you
There is inspiration in your words, that you have accomplished. It was and enjoyable read, but a bit chaotic. Try to organize your thoughts a little clearer. You have the beginnings of a good writer and I encourage you to keep writing. Your language,and spelling are good. This may have worked better as a short story.
Awww so sad, I want to bring you some chicken soup. Great! you invoked an emotion! I believe its the purpose of all writing and you nailed it! The proof of a true writer, writing even when sick. This was short and sweet. Good job!
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