OK, if i had to rate it, i would give an 8-9/10. very well written, the beginning was superb, i love how you gave a hint of the end and the beginning, and then went on to explain what had happen, really great way of writing this. it wasn't too long either, I've found on this site that people will pro-long a story, thinking it just makes it better for the reader, but usually it becomes filler and hard to read. this story ended well, had a good pacing, loved it. if i had to give it a flaw, it was that it got hard to read the part when they were arguing over who drank it. i can understand why that was in, but it felt unnecessary, if you cut that in half, it would make that part easier to read and more enjoyable. all in all though, great work, but please, don't make a sequel to it, it ended off well and i wouldn't want to see it turn out bad with another part added on to it.
ok, with a rating, id give it a 7/10 for the romance aspect of it. i can understand that the way they bonded was through bad puns, but it feels overused with the laughter and giggles and the snorting over and over again. props to you for using different words for the same meaning though. the puns were good too, even though they're supposed to be bad, i could tell you put effort in to making them like that, well done on that. if i could also add, the beginning was really hard to read, i was kind of pushed into a scenario with no explanation. if i may, i would recommend starting the story withs something simple, possible starting of with the main character briefly talking about how its halloween and he has to go to a party. nothing big though, you'd really only need 1 sentence to give the intro an easier way of reading it. all in all though, its a good story, good romance to it, with comedic aspect of it all. hope you can make another similar to this
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