I found your text very unusual. It's special because you speak of your own ideas, in this case your happiness. "This is hard. Searching for happiness.". And I agree with it, but the question is why do you want to be happy. ;)
Hello Curious Traveler,
I find your text very relaxing. You sit down on a bench, and you simply describe what is going on around you. A good point too is that you describe things well, and I can easily imagine the ambience in my little head.
It was a good experience.
I picked your story to review, I was searching random texts and I stopped at yours, because the first impression that I received, is that your story is well formated (it's lighten, and it's not a pain for the eyes).
After, I liked the end, when you tell that the woman maybe is not a witch, and we can suppose that she used her wand just to scare the wolf.
Also, the story has awaken my curiosity until the end, and it's a very good point.
The only hiccup marked, is the beginning of the story.
For me, the discussion between the rabbit and the wolf has no sense in the story, it seems to be here just to extend the store.
However, it's just my opinion, and maybe (after have seen the title) it's a serie, so maybe you had to link the rabbit to the story...
Good story anyway.
Don't stop, and write on.
P.S. : Sorry for my poor english.
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