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Review of Sounds of youths  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Lynda, I am back again with another review! I hope you are well and blessed.

Immediately while reading your poem, I was reminded by my own childhood. I still hear my father yelling at us to not slam the front door as we ran out. I remember playing in the street with my friends, playing every kind of ball imaginable,riding our bikes and jumping off while they were still moving. The joys of being a kid...such freedom! I like this poem. It brought back so many great memories for me. I thought you poem described the carefree life that childhood should be. Just as your previous poem that I reviewed, this poem is also joyful and fun. The format you chose is again, a great choice for this poem. I felt that this poem was also a well written piece of work.

I didn't see anything that needed a second look in this poem either. I thought it was polished and a fun read.

This concludes my review. Thank you for the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I look forward to the next one! Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of Sounds of Spring  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Lynda with a y! Thank you so much for in bidding our dress auction! I am going to be the one gifting the five reviews you won from Aaron. I am pretty sure that I have never reviewed any thing from your port before so this a treat for me also. My reviews are always intended to be helpful and encouraging, please accept it in the spirit is given.*Smile*

I liked this poem because not only do you describe the happy aspects of Spring but your word choices also made me feel what you described. Your poem feels vibrant, fun and joyful. If words could skip...yours would.*Laugh*Your format was also an excellent choice because it is free and uninhibited, just as Spring is. I thought your poem was written well and fun to read.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I am glad I chose this poem for my first review. I look forward to reading more.

This concludes my first review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing your poem. I hope you enjoyed my review. On to the next one! Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of Half Moon Risin'  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello DyrHearte writes ! This review is a part of the WDC Power Reveiwers Anniversary Raid! *Confettig* YAY!!*Confettib*

I loved your poem. I thought the imagery was written beautifully. I thought the uncommon format and cadence was refreshing. I like to think that the quickening of the pace at the end was imitating the accelerated heart beats of the young lovers. I thought your poem was a beautifully written original piece.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I really enjoyed the read.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of The bridge  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Chris! I thought I would repay the honor of your review with a review.I hope my review finds you blessed and inspired.

I really like this poem! It was not predictable and it came together nicely! The imagery was also written and of course I love the message. Well done!

I saw couple of things that I thought might need a second look.
In the first line, I think you probably meant"There was a couple madly in love"
In the last line of the first stanza, I would remove the word each or maybe you meant "broke each his heart".
In the first line of the second stanza, I think their should be the.

These of course are just my suggestions. I really love the poem and the message you send.


This concludes my review. Thank you so much for the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. Thanks again for reading and reviewing mine. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of Who Is Death  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Carly! This review is served as a thank you for your participation in the G.O.T from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  July Raid. I hope my review finds you blessed and inspired.*Smile*I don't believe I have reviewed anything from your port before, so let me say that my review is intended to helpful and encouraging. Please accept it in the spirit it is given

I liked your poem. After reading it, I was reminded that there are cultures and religions that do not see death as a bad thing/entity. And that depending on your point of view, death can be a good thing. I thought that your poem did a good job of bringing that into light and giving your readers food for thought.I like to think that death has been cast in a villainous part, and that he is just doing the job he was tasked. Nothing more..nothing less. I enjoyed your poem, I thought it was written well.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I appreciate the opportunity. I hope you enjoyed my review. I wish you much success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of One Day One Place  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Kenword! This review is served as a thank you for your participation in the G.O.T from the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  July Raid. I hope that my review finds you blessed and inspired.

I liked your poem. I thought it was original and a nice read. I did need to read it a couple times because for me the format coupled with the meter was somewhat unconventional. I like the "matter-of-fact" tone of your piece. It gives off an attitude of what's it to you-this is how it is. I like that. My favorite stanza is the last one. I wholeheartedly agree, that no matter the circumstance, situation, or how others perceive us...our maker knows us best. And in the end...that is what really matters. It is up to us to open our hearts and accept all that he is willing to share with us. I liked your poem and it left me with food for the thought.

I didn't see anything that needed a second look except the "there" at the end of the first line. I wasn't sure if it should have been there or their. Overall, I had no complaints.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I appreciate the opportunity. I hope you enjoyed my review. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn.

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Review of Sea of Humanity  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Princess Pepper. This review is part of the July Raid for the WDC Power Reviewers Group. I hope review finds you blessed and inspired.

I liked your poem. I think the feeling of loneliness and anxiety is a common feeling, especially in today's world. We are so dependent upon technology that we do not interact as much physically as we have in the past; causing us to feel isolated and alone. I thought that the format of your poem served your poem well and the flow of your poem was easy to maintain. I thought that your poem was easy to relate to and written well.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to read and review your work. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for the work that you did for the G.O.T. I wish you much success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn
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Review of Mr. Prendergast  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Loved it. As like your other pieces, this one was entertaining, original and thought provoking. I had no idea where this story was going to go. It wasn't the least bit predictable. I love that that you used the language of the piece to add some authenticity to it. It added an extra element to the piece that was unexpected. I am glad that you decided to leave it as it is. I have to say that, out of all of your pieces...this one is now my new favorite. It was such a surprise and a joy to read. As always, the quality of your writing never disappoints. If I could, I would give it 10 stars.
Taryn


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello James! It been awhile since I've been here...so I thought I would start with your port.

I absolutely love this! This piece contains your humor and cynicism and it's an awesome combination. It is funny, original and entertaining. I really enjoyed reading this. It is you...right down to the soul of it.

I don't know how many people have given you title options but the only one I can come up with is " A Desperate Proposition" and I don't believe it does it justice.

Keep up the good work my friend.
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Review of Snake charmer  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again. I am back with another review for a poem that you have posted on the Plug Page. As I stated in the last review, my review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. I hope you can accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I liked this poem also. Again, the imagery is great and I like the story you tell. I think the metaphors you used to descibed your own dissolusion of yourself and the shame you felt when you realized your wrong doing was genius. Each of your short stanza's melded well into each other and there were no questionable pauses to make you reader wonder if they missed something. I think your audience can relate to the feelings you describe in this poem. It also makes you think about how many times have we used someone unknowingly for our own gain; not realizing it because we were so caught up in our own thoughts and feelings. I like how you used "stepped from your light" to describe the embarrasment and shame that you felt once you realize what you had done.I thought that your piece flowed well and gave your readers food for thought.

I didn't see anything that needed a second thought. I enjoyed the poem.

This concludes my review. Thanks again for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I have enjoyed the experience. I hope you enjoyed my reviews just the same. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello! I found your poem on the Plug Page and I thought I would check it out. I hope my review finds you in great health and in inspiring spirits. My honest review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. I hope that you can accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

After reading your poem and seeing the rating that it has been given already, I don't think you need me or anyone else to tell you that this is a well written piece. The imagery is expertly written and vibrant. Although the initial feeling of this poem is sombre, there is a tone of hope here. For me, this is a poem of exception. You describe the hardships of life, and yet the exception to it all..the light you have available to you, makes it all worth it and the troubles temporary. I thought that the flow of this piece was very easy to maintain because the rhyme scheme you chose was obvious and melodic. I thought your poem was well written and a joy to read. I saw myself in your poem as I am sure many other people have said the same.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your poem was original and well written.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouaging. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. May the light you speak of in this poem forever shine for you. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello again! This is the fifth and final installment to your poetry review package purchased by BillieGail memory of Cheyenne . My reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging. I hope that you can recive them in the spirit they are given.*Smile*

I like this poem a lot. Again, I do tend to like poems with a definitive format. The flow was great in this piece, allowing the reader to concentrate on the atmosphere of your piece that you created. The rhyme scheme was consistent throught out this piece and I thought your word choices were also good. I thought this piece was really relatable. I would dare say that most of us wear a mask...just as your quote from Mark Twain stated. I even believe that some of us wear a mask to hide the real truth from even ourselves. I loved how you compared the turoil of hiding your true self with a raging storm. I thought this poem was written well and is my favorite of the pieces that you have given me to review.

I didn't see anything that needed a second look with this poem. I thought it was well written and a joy to read.

This concludes my review and the installments to your poetry package. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my reviews have been helpful and encouraging and I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Whispering Stars  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello! It's me again with the fourth installment to your poetry review package. I hope my reviews have been helpful and encouraging and that you have enjoyed them because I have enjoyed reading your work.

We are blessed with the stars whether we see them or not. Just as our loved ones who have passed on are not really gone, but are with us all the time. The idea that our loved ones are stars is not a new idea, but I like how you wrote about it. The tone of your piece is very soft and melancholic. It touches your reader like morning dew on fresh cut grass. I thought your poem was really touching. The imagery in this piece, like the tone, is very soft and compliments this poem well.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look other than the issues that I mentioned in the past reviews. The inconsistent meter in the stanza's do make for a rough read that I feel hinders the softness that you have acquired with this piece. This, of course, is just my opinion.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my reviews have been helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! It's me again with the third installment to your poetry review package. I hope you are enjoying the reviews that have been done so far and I hope that they have been helpful and encouraging. I have enjoyed reading your work and look forward to reading more.*Smile*

I enjoyed this poem. I thought that the imagery was written well. I could see and feel the weathered pages and I so wanted to read them. The poem makes your readers wonder what was written in those weathered pages and whose hands had touched them. Whose heart was displayed on those pages with the many words of feeling written? I love this particular style of poem because it almost makes sure that the poem has a definitive rhythm to it. I thought this poem was beautifully written with the imagery as added morsels of goodness.

I didn't see anything in this poem that needed a second look. I thought this piece was well written.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope that my reviews have been helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello again! This is the second installment of your five review poetry package gifted to you by Billie. I hope this review finds you happy and enjoying this Memorial Day. My review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I thought this poem was interesting because it was written for the Humorous Contest, but I didn't find it funny. I thought it was sad, because you personified the paperclips and made me relate and have apathy for them. The beauty of poetry is that it can state one thing and make you see something else. I thought your poem was written in a way that allowed your readers to see the paperclips as more than just paperclips; and not only that...but possibly allowed your readers to see themselves as the paperclips in their own lives. I thought your poem was clear in its' imagery and gave your readers food for thought.

As with the last piece, I found the rhythm and meter of this piece a little choppy. What helps me with making sure that my poems are smooth in flow is that I read it out loud and remove any unnecessary words. I also make sure that the rhyme scheme I chose (if there is one) is consistent throughout the piece. This is just my personal opinion. I thought your poem was a good one and was over all written well.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! This is the first installment of your 5 poem review package gifted to you by BillieGail memory of Cheyenne in the "Invalid Item" . I hope this review finds you in great health and inspiring spirits. My review is intended to be helpfuland and encouraging. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I liked this poem for several reasons. I never thought of writing a poem from the perspective of a tree and I thought your personification of it was done well. I thought the imagery was vivid and clear and allowed your personification of both tress to become real and believable. The envy you mention in the title is expressed well in the stanza's of your poem and I think you did a fine job of explaining the source of that envy. I thought that your poem was authentic and original and well written.

What I thought needed a second look is really just a personal opinion. With your stanza's being diffenet lengths and the meter different in them all..the flow of your piece was a little choppy for me. Overall, I think your poem is good, but I feel it could be even better if the read was a little smoother. Just my opinion.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Tary

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello! This is the second installment of your winning package in the "Invalid Item" . I hope this review finds you in great health and inspiring spirits. My review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I liked this poem also. It is very sweet and describes very well the feelings of a parent sending thier child off to school for the first time. The anxiety is enormous, and the idea of sending your child off to a place where they might be rejected and hurt is unthinkable. But, parents do it all the time, every year; and it seems that the children are more resilient and stronger than we are. Amazing isn't it? I thought your poem did a great job in describing this anxiety and the feeling that parent experiences. My child is fifteen now, and I still have the same feelings when sending her off to school as I did the very first time. I thought your piece was easy to relate to and allowed me to remember those experiences of my own. I thought the tone of your piece was consistent from start to finish.

The only thing that I thought needed a second look with this piece was the format. I think that a traditional format with stanza's would benefit this piece better and in turn will allow the rhyme scheme to be easier to find and the flow easier to follow. I still think this is a great piece and the idea of refomating this piece is just my opinion.

This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work and for bidding and winning my package. I wish you much success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Remember When  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello again! This is Taryn with beginning of your package from "Invalid Item" . I hope my review finds you in great health and inspiring spirits. Please understand that my review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

How many times have we said those words "I remember when?" It is especially gratifying when the person we are speaking to can say "Yes...I remember that too." I liked your poem because it reminds me so much of my fiance and I. We often reminisce over our first meeting, first feelings, first impressions, and first experiences with each other. Your poem more than adequately expresses the feeling you feel when thinking of the one you love. I feel that anyone who is or ever has been in love can relate to this poem, so I feel it greatly appeals to the masses. I also think that the flow of your poem was very natural, allowing the loving and happy tone of your piece to carry well throughtout your poem. I liked your poem and I thought it was well written.*Smile*

I didn't see anthing in your poem that needed a second look. Again, I thought your poem was well written.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your poem. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Thanks again for bidding and winning my package on the "Invalid Item" . I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Muse  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I found your poem on the plug page and I thought I would give it a read. First let me say that my review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. If I offend you in any way, please do not hesitate to let me know. I hope that you accept my review in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I love poetry because it is very subjective and can be interpreted in different ways by different people, without changing a single line or word of the poem. I can read a poem one day and read it another day and get two different meanings from it ...or find something new in it. Good poetry always leaves something behind for it's readers to chew on long after they have read the piece; whether it's a feeling, a thought, an image or an idea. Your poem did that for me. The over all feeling I got from your piece is one of gratitude, of inspiration, of admiration, of love and thankfulness. After reading...I felt like I was in a meadow, basking in an evening sun of warm peaceful golden rays. I loved your poem. I thought it was written well. I thought the indirect imagery you project with your word choices were fantastic. What I love most about your poem is the feeling I get when I read it...the imagery that is emitted is very vibrant...allowing not just images to be seen...but also felt. I can't begin to pick a favorite stanza because they all fit so well together. The flow of this piece is very natural and so easy to follow and maintain. Very nice job with this piece.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look. I thought your piece was a very nice, inspiring, and polished read. Did I say I liked your piece?*Smile*

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I enjoyed the experience. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success with your reading and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Confused But OK  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello! I found your poem on the Plug Page and I thought that I would check it out. I hope my review finds you in wonderful health and inspired spirits. My review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. If my review offends you in anyway...please do not hesitate to contact me and let me know. It is not the purpose of my review to offend you. Please accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

After reading your poem...I thought...how many times have I been in this situation (or one like it) or felt this way? Many times. Break ups are so hard to deal with unless you were able to have closure. And from the looks of things...the speaker does not appear to have closure...but is working their way there. Closure has so much power. It is amazing how different life can look once the open ends of our lives have found an end. I thought your poem did a good job of expressing the confusion, the hurt and the pain that is felt by not having closure. Without closure, it is almost as if you have to convince yourself that what you are experiencing is real and not a dream..at least it was that way for me. I feel that your poem is easy to relate to... anyone can understand what the speaker is going through.

There is nothing that I think needs a second look without completely rewriting your poem..and I don't think it is necessary. It is obvious that your poem is a free form, but I will say that the mix matched rhyme scheme and meter is hard to grasp sometimes because the stanzas are different. It makes the flow of reading this piece a little rough. This of course is just my humble opinion.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success with your work and with your writing. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Hold me  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello! I found your poem on the Plug Page and I thought I would check it out. I hope my review finds you in great health and in inspired spirits. My review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. Please accept it in the spirit it is given. If I offend you in any way...please let me know..or if you need my review explained more in depth...please do not hesitate to contact me. It is not my intention to offend you.*Smile*

What I liked about your poem was the feeling of desperation and hurt. Even though this poem is not loaded with descriptions and adjectives...the tone of this piece is well carried out. I thought your poem was easy to relate to; I dare say, that anyone reading this poem can say that they have been in this place before. We are human..no matter how introverted we are...or how much we claim to like being alone, being held and loved is a basic need that is not taught.

What I thought needed a second look is a combination of several things. First thing I noticed is the use of commas...there are way too many. And to be honest none of them are really needed except for the ones in line eleven. I say this because you really are not writing in complete sentences. I also think that if you center this poem...the flow would be so much better, not to mention that I think the depth of feeling would be better portrayed. A few exclamation marks are fine...but I think there is an overabundance of them here. In the eighth line...i should be I. I do believe this is just a typo. Centering the poem is just my personal opinion..especially because the length is so short and because it isn't written in complete sentences, but the other items I listed are grammatical.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success in life and with your writing. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of No Storm Warning  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello! A while ago, you reviewed a poem from my port and I now that I am done recuperating I thought that I would come to your port and return the favor. I hope this review finds you in great health and spirits. My review is intended to be helpful and encouraging, but truthful. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I loved this poem. The imagery was wonderfully vivid. I could feel the wind, the rain, and the electricity in the air that storms bring. I completely understood and could relate to the emotional storm you spoke of. Sometimes in life, we don't realize how one particular event shapes us. I do feel that to protect ourselves, we sometimes downplay an incident or we don't admit the pain. I thought your poem did a very good job of relating these facts. I fully believe that people or the drama they bring can be a major storm in our lives. Sometimes we aren't even able to assess the damage until the winds and the rain have gone. I thought your poem was very heartfelt, polished and a joy to read.

I didn't see anything in your poem that I thought needed a second look.

This concludes my review. Thank you so much for the pleasure of reading your work and for reviewing mine. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of Somewhere  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! A while back, you reviewed some of my work, so after some recuperating, I am back to try and return the favor. My review is intended to be helpful and encouraging...but truthful. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given. *Smile*

I liked this poem a lot. From the first line, you drew me into the dark world you created. The words you chose to create this world made me feel and see tormented fragments that were once whole. Although this poem speaks of monsters of one kind or another...for me this poem is speaking of anyone who feels dejected or is paying a horrible price for something they have done, or even some one who is living a life of pretense or without care. This poem can be seen in different ways. I love that it is not one dimensional. I thought that this poem was extremely well written. It is easy to follow, the rhyme scheme is very natural, and the imagery is very vivid. I think this poem is very polished and captivating.

I didn't see anything that I thought needed a second look.

This concludes my review. I hope that my review was helpful and encouraging. Thank you so much for allowing me this pleasure. I am so sorry it has taken me this long to return the favor of your review, but I am glad I did. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Review of The Roman Road  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! You honored me with a review and I am here to return the favor. I hope this review finds you in good spirits and in great health. My review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.

I really had a hard time choosing something in your port to review. It looks like you have so many great items and I am horrible at making decisions. However, I settled on this because I am familiar with the book of Romans and from what I can remember, I am pretty sure I have never read a poem about this book before. So I thought now would be a good time to do so. I liked this poem a lot. Your poem took right to a place that was familiar to me and I could see it play out clearly with your poem. I thought your poem was easy to follow and the rhythm was easy to maintain. I thought your poem was well written and a joy to read.

I didn't see anything major in or about your poem that I thought needed a second look. However, I will say..just as my personal preference, that I usually follow the normal rules of writing a sentence if I am going to use punctuation in poetry. Such as only capitalizing the beginning of a new thought..and not necessarily every line. I also noticed that the punctuation was missing in the first paragraph. But honestly, I think that your poem would be better served by NOT using any punctuation and capitalizing every line. I say this because for the most part, you are not writing complete sentences. Again, this is just my lowly opinion. Overall I thought your poem was great and reminded me of a story that I had not thought of in a while.

This concludes my review. Thanks again for taking the time out to read and review my poem, and for the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work as well. Maybe I can come back sometime and read more.*Smile*I wish you continued success in writing and in life. Write on, read on, rate on! Taryn

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Helena! I came across your poem through the random read and I thought I would give it a review. I believe that this is the first time that I have read and reviewed your work so thank you for the pleasure. Please understand that my review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. I hope you accept it in the spirit it is given.*Smile*

I liked your poem. I thought it was original and funny. I thought that the imagery was really written well. I could envision everything you described and the tone of your piece was brightly portrayed and light. I thought that your poem was well written. It is obvious that it is a freestyle poem as the stanzas are uneven. They are almost all separate entities because the rhyme scheme is also a little off. All though the rhyme scheme is a little off, it was easy to find and maintain.

The only issue that I thought needed a second look is in the first stanza third line. Cheked should be checked.

This concludes my review. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work. I wish you continued success in your writing and in life. I hope that you write as if your life depends on it but let it flow as if there is no end to it. Write on, read on, write on! Taryn

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