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Review of Good-bye Letter  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

April 20, 2009
DON'T FORGET YOUR EARTH DAY READINGS!

OH, hello there to:
River McKenna

This review is from a member of:

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So a very hearty welcome to wc is also e-mailed your way this morning, dear poet. WELCOME!

The poem you've written, GOOD-BY LETTER is in the category of one of those awful tell-all pertaining to personality modes.

Can't help to ID with both actually. However, one may learn what not to do re: a social realm of friendship with this vivid, rhyming eye-opener.

Thanks, so glad to read a five star poem any day of the week.
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
April 16, 2009

"When http://www.writing.com, author George R. Lasher elects to dabble in novel format, dear readers on PRP (PublicReviewPg) sit back and enjoy the ride. It may take the weekend, it may take the day ... no matter the time, this novel read shall steer those whom like to write ...

or those who like to review on writing with their own peculiar judgements calls ... to a lofty perch of satisfied reader.

Sometimes one waits to find onsite: all three of the most importan E's of authorship.

THE FESTIVAL is frought thru and thru with imagination bordering on daily haps evident in our techno wars of today, our likes/ dislikes of musical concert popularity, our need to exhibit what bugs us.

SUM: Here, in THE FESTIVAL, a rock band causes the most unthinkable thing known to mankind to happen to their viewing audience.

Still, with finesse and noticeable hard work, George Lasher entertains." REV Blurt from April Sunday "Invalid Item"  "Invalid Entry" 

Especially *Heart*

George Lasher's tell-all and direct placement of "epic proportion."

Character names of: Delalforte
Anchorman, Bob Stockbridge
Hounds of Hell, the band

All witty phrases which wake readers up to reality fiction in any genre ... a qualifying knack from this talented author.

So, Lasher, what's the haps? Well done!

And if spoofing the six o'clockers ... George remains a man of my own *Heart*

Always enjoy a non-media look at the term:
"TV news networks."

Thanks! Enjoy Spring!
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Review of The Ride Home  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

April 15, 2009

Finding your fine stories today is uplifting.

In TRAIN MEETING the main character meets the proper stranger.

Imagine even riding on a train would be swell from this desk. Keep up the good work, enter those contests onsite. Which you seem to a have quite a knack for writing and contributing to.

Best luck ---

Cordially from TEFF

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#1412016 by Not Available.
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (3.5)
April 15, 2009

 Good monring Free.

Everything in topic rhyme lines deliver here and compliment your poem's intro.

THE ACCUMULATION OF TIME from free.your.mind combines all one might see on the proper fun walk.

Here find Mother Nature served up just right.

Nice pen name by the way. Welcome to WC, enjoy yourself, dear poet.

 Cordially, TEFF Newbie Frontliner

REV inclusive for group:

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Review of Exiled  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (4.0)

Rev sent publically on

EASTER DAY, 2009


Dear MD Maurice

April 12, 2009

Found your flash entry for

 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#1537106 by Not Available.


Rather new to
"Invalid Item"  "WDC Frontliners Group" 

Am assuming EXILED won a story of the week, inclusion in a chance for another win for story of the month in March. Congrats there.

Inanimate objects the content. In sum here discover a ring talking a mile a minute re: life with a married couple. (Reader assumption for a couple's tax stat. YET, perhaps an idea (ho ho heee hhee) to add to a longer re-write if the author so desires. Which also affords a great start then.

From handwritten notes from the desk of April Sunday Frontliner newbie, bio up
THE SUGGESTIONS:

Basically, more & more in the category of online writing widely varied audiences come across stories continuing in flash style once, twice, three times ... as long as it takes. EXILED could become longer.

Never a need to let go the good ones is also an author-to-author hint from this prez of "Invalid Item" 

Now the notes:

 Love vocab: resilience/ modicum

*Heart* " ... words became brutal weapons ..."

HOWEVER ... Over the years TEFF's term repeated in revs since Oct 2004 onsite, dear author for "excessive verbs in a predicate" runs to "verb sandwich."

For eg. a verb sandwich is mayo, mustard, ham, onions, relish. A lot to sink into between a few paragraphs of rye. You see?

If this is memorable, so be it.

Of --- "to which I have been banished."
eg. where I'm exiled (Teff rev comment)

Not a rewrite, you do as you pleae on another edit, perhaps.

Then looking down the line to other verb sands ... cut with a butter knife to

happy voices talking

"they would raise" === how they'd

Do you see where this occurs?

At: "it was as if I had become dull ____ "

Go to "I grew dull."

Well, personally for the last quote, gee hope not.

Anyone recalls themes re: brass rings.

HOWEVER, this very well plotted, brief tell-all gathers creative theme for an inanimate object story. Yes, EXILED picks up on this story aspect.

EXILED --- Highly impress an open audience.

Well, good luck.

Cordially, TEFF
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

"With OUR STORY from the portfolio of http://www.writing.com author, Dave, readers may delightfully discover a non-fiction novel. Opening with twenty-one year old sons, their birthday on the horizon, a father looks back. Then follows, Tracy's trip to hospital, birth certificates ... and a true family history filling lives and chapters. Great undertaking, grand result." Rev from April Sunday "Invalid Item"  "Invalid Item" 
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Review of Poison Emeralds  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


March 25 The WED, 2009

Might one linger a moment forevermore on the mention of Poe in POISON EMERALDS from the portfolio of VictoriaMcCullough
What an All Hallow's Eve tribute to
spooky, brand new:

 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#1518804 by Not Available.


Au Contraire, PRP, contrary to popular opinion submissions for Fall publication, serious authors realize include Spring's get the lead out.

Unless you might show us a book publication, an anthology, a short story magazine which goes to press Oct 1 without Spring entries, the serious side of timely content for autumn writing seasonally seeking publication is where now exactly? March.

March: Mums up, marigold seedlings in March. All golden eventually.

This contest host, so pleased sending out the very first rev for the very first poem submitted today in the "mawing early."

Thank you, Feather Duster.

Of the ghoul, the Halloween nuance, the scare, the content of POISON EMEARLDS ... the word superb comes immediately to mind.

Hey, me? I'm outah here, reading this one again and again. Poetry of high caliber does that to one. So, dear poet Contest ON!

Officially waiving any further entrance fee for this author, who also receives complimentary membership/entrance to
"Invalid Item"  hosting this contest as per group activity. Judges may apply.

Thankyouthankyouthankytoyou, to yourself, dear Feather. This is one fabulous poem.

Signed April Sunday
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

March 24, 2009

Good morning going out to

Rogue♥Sherri

Welcome to http://www.writing.com

Finding:
 I Love You More Than Ice Cream  (E)
20 song titles in a short story
#1538680 by Rogue♥Sherri


supplies a brief respite from sunny Spring skies outside this revver's window.

Wow! This is so totally sad, yet a very difficult subject is covered well while keeping the beat intact.

When the dialogue gets to "Sing"

must admit, a few tears fell at this desk. So genre accomplished, Rogue.

Cordially, TEFF
"Invalid Item" 

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Review of JUST DO IT  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)


March 24, 2009

Dear Phoenix,

Very much like your poem JUST DO IT, found this morning on Auto Rewards Page.

The fun-read of this poem is the presentation which reminds one of a greeting card messsage. Since cadence is so deliciously vivid.

E.g. at:

"To act on good intentions
the satisfaction brings."

Today, this humble revver keeps ...

"In your abilities believe ..."

Re: reader tie-in to: Publication, websites, contests ... well a rough world out here, flooded with talented writers with something to convey.

JUST DO IT ... points an audience in the proper direction.

Thank you, phoenix
And Great job with this one.

Therefore, RHYME ON!
Welcome to W.C. Enjoy!
Cordially, TEFF

"Invalid Item"  Accepting Poetry!

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)



Here's a contest entry which is TWENTY STAR material.
E-mail message & REV From: April Sunday For more on this rev syle please see "Invalid Item"  where public revs sent are repeated.

3/17, 2009, 7:13am To: George R. Lasher

ST PATRICK'S DAY 2009
TOP O' TH' MORNING, PRP!

http://www.writing.com gifted author,
georgelashser shall find a kinda three part rev/plus in his mailbox this fine, St Pat's. Come his way then to announce a fantastic Irish short story.

the wonderful

 Christmas at Scuzzy O'Malley's   (18+)
An Irish bar owner's tale of bad luck on Christmas Eve.
#1499989 by George R. Lasher


officially wins 20,000 gp and Best Story of 2008's "Invalid Item" 
All rewards & membership courtesy of "Invalid Item"  with more info also available on "Invalid Item"  and "Invalid Item" 

Now, excuse me please, PRP while tie-ins above add to the thrill of being Irish since 'tis our day to excel after all. Keeping in mind rev grace is not etched in stone ... shall continue now to adore and promote this short story to our wc reading audience, as well all online guests.

Well, thanks goes out to this author for succeeding in all of the three E's of writing quite well. One word for this story ala a rave rev is truly: Superb!

Take all of an impressive character list, time spent crafting a worthy, believable plot, weaving Christmas theme allows George R. Lasher to come away with a perfect production to boast about each Christmas season forevermore. Weaving murder and robbery, romance and mayhem hereby accomplished with flamboyant ease. Never a trite undertaking by any means.

Thus ends part one of this rave review.

Part Two --- a trad blurt aka a caption for the author to use at his own discretion re: future submissions (if any) of this great treasure chest of seasonal mirth. Who doesn't come a away from a 19,000+ short story of value with a gift to remember? The author donating time creating these scenes via proper ribald entertainment found amid the crisp paragraphs. Look for constructive phrases such as "Kermit in a trench coat" one among many offering Irish them of pure wit.*

" ... "Christmas at Scuzzy O'Malley's " 
is the place to look for cheer anytime of the year. Sit down & enjoy "the menu" perhaps order a pickled egg. Wait until Santa shows up, watch someone promptly plug the guy. Then wait for Chicago's finest to barge inside a pub on "the bad side of town. "

George R. Lasher hopefully won't suffer a moment's bout of dissension while going on to top his best. Also the best short story find in 2008 from this humble deskside.

Chicago side, "the Illiana Expressway" side, the comedy gem side of winter life where "icy wind" rocks Scuzzy's place ... mixed well with a past of a determined former lover named Ramona, and Scuzz's partner, named Gunner.

Odds are here's a Christmas to remember. Every par is laudable, every twist in the tale a tad riveting. Challenges to guess the surprise ending for first-time readers during this fine holiday reading venue are on the table of delectable fiction, to be sure.

Write on, George!

Great thanks, mate. REV from April Sunday


Part three ---

Last of the notes after reading this story first in Dec 2008 and a few ref times along the way, then fully this gorgeous Spring ST. Patty's Day morn ...

Readers shall find:

Christmas!

Chicago!

One old girlfriend, the unforgivable Ramona

A partner named Gunner once "a well respected" cop

The background leading up to Santa's demise
... the stiff in the red costume aka ____________, a crook & evil sinner.

Who robbed a Chicago jewelry store years ago?

Who's head over heels in love with Scuzz, the story's first person narrator?

Who seeks payback for an unsolved homicide?

The character list crests the long mile and then some. Readers (the audience, dearies) could well chew pleasantly on this story, buy a mug, jump out of the way when Chicago's finest busts in the door without missing a single beat.

Even inclusive ... find an arrogant news reporter panning for her cameraman.

Already .. a wrap this rev, an original three parter ...

*BTW, George, keeping "_______-- on a crutch" since my family loves how the phrase rolls of the sarcastic tongue. Mirth must always sound great, too boot, don't you agree?

And hey there --- PRP* check out: "Invalid Item"  and "Invalid Item"  if you write and indeed like writing or reading no-word count short stories.

HAPPY ST PATRICK'S DAY!

*Public Rev Pg
Note: Donations are always welcome for any TEFF contest. Thanks for reading.

WC -- here's another MUST READ!
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Review of 52 Candles  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

March 12, 2009

Reviewing a poetry folder, replete with sadness from Turtlegreen ... come upon the poem entry: 52 CANDLES.

Honestly, the ways & means of crafting these stanzas says much for efforts rendered concerning this specific birthday commeration.

At: "closet" -- the absence of a sunny window or dining room table top seems appropriately missing perhaps for a reason.

Withdrawn, yet active for something missing ... which the poet, no doubt leaves blank for readers to fill in between the blanks.

Ah, poetry --- esssence of the soul.

Best in all writing of the future, dear author.

Cordially, TEFF
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Review of Clara's Dollar  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)


Mar 4, 2009

Yes, that's right, Sandy~HopeWhisperer

Your 2008 submission in

"Invalid Item" 

is just this minute receiving recognition. Amazing what a huge amount of details you mange to fit inside your precious, caring, loving story.

Clara's Dollar  (E)
Story based on depression era family
#1500834 by Sandy~HopeWhisperer


is one of those gems when family comes first. A stranger is involved in providing a better Christmas than previous years. While the tradition of historic perspective also rings loud and clear.

Thanks for entering, Sandy.

You will receive an instant membership into ADC aka
"Invalid Item" 

Full inclusion for CLARA'S DOLLAR in
"Invalid Item" 

Plus 1,000 gp prize, enclosed.

Happy St. Pat's to you and yours ..

Signed TEFF
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Review of The Gift Of Life  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

March 3, 2009

Thank you ShiShad for entering

 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#1190255 by Not Available.


The contest was quite the ta ta with a full roster of submissions from the 2008 entry list, as you can see. Catching up today with "Invalid Item" 

One starter note here: Also agree after reading Old Warrior's work (ten submissions) in EHACS. Wow-wee -- he's quite the author, to be sure.

The poem THE GIFT OF LIFE begins with the setting of Christmas, we can see by the visual art, the creator likes angels and these are very attractive.

The very last line of the poem provides a wake up call for the recovering patient and readers alike. Offering prayerful pleas for a loved one throughout these stanzas clocks in as a heartfelt addition to our Christmas theme. *Heart* *Snow2*

All entries receive a gp prize and instant addmission to ADC "Invalid Item" 

Best March ahead ..

Cordially, TEFF
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Feb 12, 2009

Good morning, Mr. Wilcox ...

At last approaching final r/r/r for 2008's "Invalid Item"  Thank goodness.

THE LONG ROAD HOME clocks in as supurb Southern Lit, in my humble estimation.

In sum: A family awaits husband/father on Christmas Eve.

The plot reveals his lateness is partly due to Dec. weather.

Hook sentence already sets the pace for brilliant phrases such as the following favorite line sequence (one among many.)

Hook sentence: "It was snowing.

Then ---> "feathers of angel's wings, pure as fleece." Fantastic!

Of the pronoun It. Often encountering poor advice which instructs authors to avoid the word it. However, published works, newspapers etc. use IT all the time. It is snowing. -- what else would it be for setting? Oh, okay It was raining ...

Glad you use this ploy. Wilcox, when first joining here in Oct of 2004, do recall you were kinda un-officially known as the KING of FLash Fiction. This story, c-rt 2003, replete with very touching additions meeting the criteria for Christmas lists at 2,700 words. Here, the contest hostess again receives a great short story. Maybe we should sometimes ask ourselves as reviewers or contest judges whether or not the extra milage on a short story length makes a difference. I think it does and have gone on record for this all of 2007 & 2008.

Diving into the swing of things in this one, also hard to disassociate at this point. The story pulls one inside like fine taffy.

For the audio of "Ke-thunk." Perfect, Bill.

Jesse is a fine tag for a Tenn. character name. Uh oh, maybe moving toward in-depth here, but impression is pushing me on, son.

Yes -- scene set at "blanket of snow"
re: country roads. The visit, the accident ...

Wow! Applause for jumper cables, a wintry quirk, to be sure.

Wood in the stove ...

Figure in the road? OH MY GAWD!! NO! Yes ... now lead into the reaction review. Why?

Far be it from this rev to give away an ending which brings Christmas on home.

Thanks for entering.

Sure the contest shall be boosting "Invalid Item"  as best it may. So please check it out, Wilcox, at your earliest convenience.

One further suggestion. If you haven't already considered seeking publication for this one, wise to do so.

Plus, hint, hint --- Christmas stories are usually accepted 6 to 9 months before Dec. Try an online search should this suggestion apply.

Happy St. Valentine's Day to you and the fam, whose pix you sent to the contest forum.

BTW -- We are in need of building a donation list and reviews are welcome at "Invalid Item" 

Sincerely, TEFF

Enclosed find 1,000 gp prize.
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

Jan 28, 2009

Hello Smiley Face,

Thanks for entering "Invalid Item" 

Today, very much enjoy reading your story "The Gift from Santa"  .

*Heart* proper names of Gabriel, Ashwin and Lydia. Good choices.

Imagine the smiley face on some will take those forlorn attempts to cheer his son, by the little boy's father and instead turn to a sad face.

All tradgey, all humor all a part of emotional reads such as this.

The courage shown by Gabrial is very smoothly yet secretly written. Right up to the home baked cake, the guys "tuck" into."

The story's flash back points also read quite well.

Thanks again for entering. Updates are on the contest forum periodically. If interested shall open next summer with

 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#1521424 by Not Available.


Cordially, TEFF
"Invalid Item" 

PS --- 700 GP Prize in your mail box.
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Review of UNUSUAL MIRACLES  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

JAN 28, 2009

Rev for EHACS "Invalid Item"  Contest submission from Oldwarrior
Every sigle time I read one of your multiple entries, Old Warrior, your diversity never ceases to amaze me.

In sum for UNUSUAL MIRACLES find a logical conclusion for our popular, generous holiday of Christmas ...

Wait a sec ... from an animal POV. WOW!

Note peculiar happenings as characters "assay" a dog named "Skeeter ... soup bones with meat on them" all coupled with the wish to make "this kind human activity stretch ... over a much longer period."

Well said, my friend. Oh how much I agree! Akin to reasons for "Invalid Item"  being open all year 'round.

Thanks! Cordially, TEFF
"Invalid Item" 
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)


JAN 13, 2009

YES! Each and everytime a poem from Oldwarrior is marked read/ revved and awarded upon the list of submissions in "Invalid Item" 

a flabbergasting feeling assaults this keyboard.

 THE DAY BEFORE CHRISTMAS   (E)
Another humble attempt at the classic Christmas poem.
#1499339 by Oldwarrior


truly delivers the nuances surrounding Christmas. Here, find an invasion of the nasty Grinch.

Find a series of sentence type rhymes which please the eye and the mind with a soothing cadence throughout.

Here are a few of these gems from the portfolio collection of poet/ short story-ist Oldwarrior

*Heart* This explantory -- Opening line:

"Twas the day before Christmas and throughout our small county the people were searching for peace and for bounty."

Oh how wonderful this sounds!

Then the climax ensues with:

"I'm here to stop laughing and happiness and cheer for all you people no Christmas this year."

Tsk Tsk!! Oh, that terrible Grinch.

When this author turns all to calming right ... readers must be ready to be impressed by this original style of poetry.

Thanks again, gp prize inclusive with this rev.

Respectfully yours, TEFFY
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

Good Morning Old Warrior,

Getting down to revs again this morning for "Invalid Item" 

Mostly, this poem A MAN OF SIMPLE BIRTH is without a doubt a part of the Life of The Lord. And on the style you present here, absolutely adore the sentence rhymes. Seldom seen and probably hard to do.

However, the word Christmas must be in the story, or a Christmas side of the poem. This poem has the eternal sound of Easter also.

No problem, all you need do is change a tiny bit to have this entry included in the upcoming bitem: collection, which is under preparation at this time. I shall offer a tie-in summary for OUR numerous, well crafted submissions for the 2008 contest.

Okay, sending public, just so this too may be posted.

Hey, HAPPY 2009.

Your eagerness is duy noted by your other submissions at this time.

Thank YOU for helping make the contest a great success.

TEFFY

A MAN OF SIMPLE BIRTH is indeed
a TWENTY STAR POEM from Old Warrior with a strong hold on biblical history, and a note from the author of this work.

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Review of Christmas Love  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

Jan 12, 2009

Hello again, Old Warrior.

 Christmas Love  (E)
Gifts are never as good as love.
#1489450 by Oldwarrior


Your third entry in "Invalid Item" 

begins to show the contest forum you really mean business.

Because you post so many submissions ... this starts a chain reaction for other contestants. So big thanks there, too.

Inside: PRIDE GOES BEFORE A FALL

a young lad crafts an outdoor tree.

At: "ingenuity" realize this vocab choice fits the topic to a tee.

Then the author expertly moves onto Toopsa -Tawa, a neighbor lady, with storytelling ease.

And the conclusion par?

Dear Readers on PubRevPg --

find ---> " ... the little Lord Jesus would ________." Just a click away.

Wow, dearest Old Warrior, your work is wonderfully impressive.

Cordially, TEFF
GP Prize --- 800 gp
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

Jan 12, 2009

Rev for
STATIC
WHAT A BRILLIANT LIGHT  (E)
We found the Holy Grail!
#1491354 by Oldwarrior


While checking, reading and revving submissions now appearing on "Invalid Item" 

very much enjoy this epic poem from Old Warrior, his second submission.

Especially feel this poem can be called prayerful. And it is very uplifting although covering the plight of the Innocents.

AT: the line containing "precious boy." The choice of words, rhymes etc stops one in their track here. This may be the pivot point.

Another eloquent phrase (one among many) is:

" ... this night beneath that brilliant star" which sets readers smack dab in Bethlehem. In Palestine which sadly for the world theatre still experiences Christmas strife.

And with this, Old Warrior, despite your confession ... You are a poet, know it!

Cordially, TEFFY

GP Prize: 500 gp
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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

Jan 11, 2009

Oh, my goodness, Old Warrior.

This sig is special, warm, colorful and attractive. Nice FOX.

Thanks for Posting on
 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#1190255 by Not Available.


We certainly have an active contest going on, don't we just?

Happy New Year ... never too late, if you ask me.

Cordially,

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

"Writing.com author, RadioShea offers THE LIVES OF MISTY, a novel on Auto Rewards Column this last week in Dec. The novel is geared toward a Children's Lit audience, although it certainly meets the fancy of adult readers. Following Joshua and his mother, Christine i their care of a family of endearing cats ... from kitty box where the newborns abide to more than 6 chapters of growth prooves a heartwaming adventure. Specifics of the novel, told from the POV and voice of the favorite feline, Misty are sure to please readers of all ages. Strongly suggest separating this into book format onsite for easier access by chapter." April Sunday
"Invalid Item"  Dec 26, 2008
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Review of A shopping bag  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

DEC 21, 2008 only four daya to go!

Meanwhile at
 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#1190255 by Not Available.


we're presenting a huge growing list of generously submitted entries.

Author, Mike Day offers "A shopping bag" 

In sum: Enter: Joan --

" --- who was sepecial ... at school. She clung to the word when the other kids teased her for being slow," Mike informs the audience."

Joan's crossing town "fearful" and homeless.

The story pivot line mentions: "No room at the inn" giving readers pause to wonder.

Winter's in full swing by the following ... "The snow settled on her hair ..."
And: "She brushed it away with a soaking wet glove."

Oh, my! Mike, you're right to supply the crisp ending here. Circumstances like this are contagious in the winter especially, within the USA, how sad.

Another winner. You'll find some gp enclosed with this rev for your stocking. You see, *Heart* love to spend gp$ this way every holiday season. How about that from a four yr. wc author & poet, myself.

Well, gotta run bogging goes on and on at: "Invalid Item"  where EVERYONE might see a few Christmas surprises over there as well.

Very glad you submitted this heartwarming short story replete with sharing.

Merry Christmas! from TEFF

Donations are welcome for this contest which is swamped or snowed under, if you will.

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Review by April Sunday
Rated: E | (5.0)

Dec 21, 2008

Merry Christmas goes out to Milhaud - Long Tail this morning.

Thanks for your wonderful entry this year in "Invalid Item" 

There's so many Christmas/ Holiday genre poems and stories at EHACS this year, we're offering all readers and reviewers a great place to stop and linger under our proverbial tree.

 The Christmas Memory  (E)
So, you really think you know your father?
#1503072 by Milhaud - Long Tail


is an especially heart warming hunt for a Christmas tree.

Outdone by progress, the boyhood memory sees two parents and an eager boy roam the countryside in a "1941 Chevy."

Mom "Maxine" -- "invariably" makes the final choice.

When the forest "Forest" (Dad) usually cadges the family tree from each holiday season goes belly up as the treehunters main source, its on to "the Andersons."

Mr Anderson notes " .. pickins look mighty slim this year." Yet the family remains "undaunted" nonetheless.

Seeking "the perfectly sized and symmetrically shaped" item, now under a "skiff of white" snow leads nearly to mayhem.

"The Christmas Memory"  brings to the table a fast paced tale with stategically placed attention getting vocabulary.

Setting of being along for the ride is fantastic. One feels as if they too are looking out the car windows.

So, WC membership -- time to visit this story. Next, maybe a stop at "Invalid Item"  might satsify your holiday appetite as well.

WHEWWEEE! It's Christmas 2008!

DEC is really motivating these authors.

Thanks for this one, Millhaud. Find 1,000 gp prize enclosed to put under your tree.

Cordially, TEFF
"Invalid Item" 
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Review of Dear Santa  
Review by April Sunday
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Dec. 8, 2008

Good Morning, Bill ... Wow, it's been like forever. Four years? Wow.

Anyways, writing to you today due to your entry in

 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#1190205 by Not Available.


Also thanks for including the charming snapshot on our contest forum above. Fantastic addition to any Christmas Season, these smiling faces.

Okay, brief rev time.

Loved the story! Somehow the call for humour is coming through loud and clear with this tale of a man polishing glasses in a local pub ...

Look for:

Seven cows and a bull ...

A busy city street with "cars honking"

A confession in first person narration


All found, dear readers & writers right here in DEAR SANTA.

Thanks for entering. So many entries this year, donations are indeed welcome.

And above all else ... this year if anyone hears ... "On Bessy! On Bossy! On Mabel and Claire!" all the way to a bull named "Bear," well just maybe the grape juice was a little much.

Great Comedy, Wilcox. Take care.
Merry Merry! from, TEFF doing "Invalid Item" 
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