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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there Sumojo
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!*Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering the April Original Photo & Haiku contest. *Bigsmile*

The Photo:

It's a reminder of a fateful day during WWI. Lives were lost, there, yet the photo appears to be reverent, serene and surrounded by gleaming beauty as the sun awakens for the day. The pinkish hues of twilight's last gleam as the sun rises.

The peaceful view hides the secret of what happened there. Yet, the memories will never fade.


The Haiku:

Not the traditional 5-7-5 Haiku. Beautiful nevertheless with its strength of remembrance. The symbolism really stands out. It is in one respect a place where the fallen lie, yet they are surrounded by peaceful beauty.

Heartbreaking yet beautiful at the same time. *AwarenessW*

Well done! *Salute*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*
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Review of Leaving  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering the April Original Photo & Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*


Photo:

The photo shows the leaf in decay, it's time for spring to take its place with new life as shown with the dandelion. The colors and the decay surrounding the dandelion paint a perfect picture of end of life-cycle for the leaf and the beginning for the brilliant yellow weed.

Beautiful contrast!
The photo tells a complete story. Creative use of a common weed and the leftover leaf from another season.


Haiku:

I'll start with the title. Great teaser to pull the reader into the poem. *LeafBr*

*FlowerY* It works magically with the photo and Haiku. "Leaving." My mind pictures leaf, leaves -- leaving. Clever play on words! It is indeed time for the leaf to make room for the rebirth of nature.

Form:

Traditional 5-7-5 Haiku

Classy Style:

*Quill* Love the Sibilance: "sigh, supine, shift sublime."

*Target2* Strong word choices [supine, sublime] make this simple 3-lined classic involving nature pop-out for the reader! Big plus!!!

You did a remarkable job with the photo portraying such simplicity and the poetry complementing it brilliantly. It's well-crafted all the way through.

Good job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Jumping Dolphins  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, The Puppet Master
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our April Original Photo & Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*

The Photo:

Your photo brings the action of the sea to life with the dolphins diving in play, or in search of scrambling up some seafood for dinner. *Dolphin*

I loved to watch porpoises following the ferry in Texas, and the dolphins teaching their young ones how to fish in Florida. They'd come so close to the shore. They are amazing to watch and this photo brings me there, right up close and personal. It's well-defined, lighting balances the contrast of colors with the dark grey dolphins, the gorgeous blue sea and the white foam left in their flipper-tracks.

The Haiku:

The poetry paints the story to go along with the picture. It describes the action as well as the mood. Sunny California plays off the ocean with its brilliance making the reader feel surrounded by the sunshine picturing the dolphins at play or hunt whichever it may be when this photo was taken. Words and photo are totally in sync.

Form:

Traditional 5-7-5 syllable Haiku. *CheckGr*

Suggestion:

If I had one suggestion to make it would be to have some ordinary words used to describe the event and replace with some words that leave an impact with the reader at the end of the verse.

For example: "Jumping through the air," TRY: [Leaping through the surf] (Puts the reader right into the seascape where the dolphins live.)

Just one little example. Jump is more common, whereas leap has a sense of purpose -- or porpoise. *Laugh*

All-in-all:

*Wave1* Gorgeous photo, perfect nature shot of playful dolphins!

Haiku in true form meshes together neatly with the image *CheckY*

Well done! *ScallopB*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*
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Review of Fyn Wave  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello there, fyn
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering the April Original Photo & Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*

The Photo:

What a great capture of the whale showing itself up close and personal! It presents with the power of nature,a mammal which commands attention with its large size and ability to take on the force of the unpredictable sea. It keeps reminding us that it is a formidable creature indeed!

The Haiku:

You used the traditional syllable count 5-7-5 within the three lines.

*CheckY* Words chosen are strong -- "whale" "waved." Clever! It keeps the reader focused on the sea and sea creature. The word "wave" applies to the ocean itself with its waves. And the act of a whale waving for the picture -- priceless! *Bigsmile*

*PointRight* And, may I add a little play on words, here? "Fyn -- sounds like "fin" again returning the mind's eye to the sea where fins are in their natural element guiding the fish that wear them! *FishB*

This was a great combination of photo and poem. And well-constructed use of words to play with the reader's imagination. *Whale1*

Good job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of PINK AND BLUE  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Thank you for entering our April Original Photo and Haiku contest. *Bigsmile*

The Photo:

Whether it be the dawning of a new day or nearing the end, the sweet pastels paint the sky as is seen in this photo. The trees lie within the shadows awaiting more light to bring forth their color. There is such warmth and serenity captured in this photo. *Paintbrush*

The Haiku:

The words describe the handiwork of our Creator. It's a perfection woven into each day that is a gift to all whose eyes behold it.

Style:

This would not be called a "Traditional" Haiku, as it is not the usual 5-7-5 syllable count.

This poem's style is 5-10-6 syllables within the three lines. It is a different/modern Haiku.

Result:

The words and photo blend nicely to produce the imagery in the reader's imagination.

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Antheraea  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Words Whirling 'Round
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our April, Original Photo and Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*

The Photo:

Ahh, this one got me! I so enjoy watching nature and the surprises that may result. Here, the moth gets caught between the window and the screen. It seemed quite unbothered by your removing of the screen and using the tape measure to make that moth pop for the viewer's mind's eye. It brings it to life more because both nature and man-made items blend together in an odd, yet serene way. I really like that! *Delight*

The Haiku:

*InLove2* Loved these descriptive words:

Midnight wind
Heart pounding
Trapped

These are strong, well chosen words to fit within the total picture of the scene.

Form:

Traditional 5-7-5 syllabic count Haiku. *CheckY*

*Yinyang* Perfectly complementing the photo. They are companions of the creative juices of the muse brought to life.

Lovely imagery produced by the combination of the two! *Infinity*

Well done! *Butterfly2O*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Schnujo is Late to Lannister
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

This is too, funny, Jody. I'm really trying to picture you on the route doing the job. Did you watch "Dirty Jobs" years ago? Although I must admit I was quite close to a garbage pickup person many years ago. The hours were great, he stated as the job was completed early enough in the day to head to a bar. *Rolleyes* Ah, youth! That relationship did not last long. Not because of the garbage man stuff but because of the bar stuff. *Laugh*

I read your author's note that this profession did not come true, but rather, it was desired throughout childhood. You were a tomboy, too, I take it? So was I -- I think I still am! *Rolling*

*Rabbit2* Your story was well-written, and filled with imagery. You made it real as if it were indeed a non-fiction. I admire your spunk and independent choice of professions from a young age. My daughter wanted to be a mortician. Hey, some-body has got to do it!


Observation:

I remember them talking to be to me about various jobs--Didn't I want to be a teacher?

This was a fun read, and neither one of us had to get our hands dirty. *Ha*

Good job!*Trash*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Dew Drop  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

First Impressions:

*LeafG* Falling drops of water and leaves make a glorious backdrop for poetry. So much can be visualized through this image that it reminiscent of one's life and times.

Further Impressions:

*GemV* The metaphor of the water drop collects into another drop merging as one, and love relationships make it meld beautifully. You brought the reader up close and personal by bringing fond memories of days of youth.

Parting Thoughts:

*PaintBrush* Lovely imagery with well-woven words that fit together perfectly into the tapestry of this poem. It is nature and love, beginning and end. It is life itself.

Well-done! *Leaf2G*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Once More Now  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our dialogue with an invisible entity prompt in March. *Shamrock*

Initial Thoughts:

The plot was set up quickly as the reader is taken to the Irish pub on St. Patrick's day. One patron seeks an empty stool at a table where another patron sat. He was told the seat was saved for a friend. That patron found a seat another spot over and began hearing a dialogue between that patron and , well, nobody visible! *Ha*

Further Thoughts:

The patrons were quite curious about the disembodied voice being heard at a table where only one patron was sitting. It became a full pub curiosity as others wondered if the strange voice was from the seat-saving friend, Dylan, who may have been a ventriloquists. By then the drinks were flowing pretty quickly on this special night.
Annie the barmaid, delivered drinks to that table and heard the disembodied voice speak of her loveliness, and that she'll have men lined up outside the door awaiting a date with her.

Odd Happenings:

Magic happens as what the invisible voice predicted was happening to Annie right at that moment. Annie began to sense he was something quite special, but wondered why he could not be seen if he's so magical.

Mystery Solved:

Annie, is told by his friend Dylan, the story of the beginning of the end of his friend's visibility. *Ghost*

Parting Thoughts:

Humorous!!! I loved the conclusion that wrapped that night up at the Irish pub with fun and a big "Aha!" moment. *Laugh* It only took a hundred years to figure it out. But then, all good things come to those who wait! *Rolling*

Conclusion:

One or two quotation mishaps, but otherwise a fun, quick and very quirky story. You followed the tough prompt easily and made it your own. You added the humor and it fit with the substance of the tale.

Fine entertainment! *Glass3*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there Schnujo is Late to Lannister
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

Initial Thoughts:

I knew I was entering a world, another world, a world where trees glow.

Further Thoughts:

I enjoyed the slow build-up of the mystery as the trees were being examined by taking a bit of bark scrapings. Nothing could be found out as each new vial was used to gather information. Seth was a fine partner in the paranormal experience as he did his best to control his nervousness while Jim did the bark-scrapings. The trees glowed, but nothing gave them a hint of where the glow was coming from. Until ... *BareTree2*


Observation:

Seth's is simply wondering if the trees are going to suddenly come to life and eat them. [Seth is OR Seth's simply wondering]

Loved this Part!

"And warmth can mean life and the last thing he wanted was to make a tree angry by copping a feel without asking."
*Rolling*! I loved that unexpected bit of humor amid the tense moments.


Parting Thoughts:

Just as the reader felt secure to go back into the forest ... *Shock2*

*Mountains* Yes, this was a cliffhanger. It would have been unexpected had it not been stated in the brief description. But then, nothing says paranormal better than trees all aglow and the picture of Jim's eyes growing wide. Poor Seth, hope he decided the right option.

Well done, and a fun read! *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Festive and Green  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Don Two
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!

I am also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy Genre page looking for an amusing piece that would fit within my Comedy Newsletter theme. Since the Newsletter is due out tomorrow, 3/17, I wanted a couple St Paddy's day items to highlight. Yours will be one. *Ha*

Initial Impressions:

Someone is going to explain what St. Patrick's Day is all about to aliens. Now I knew it would be amusing, and anxiously read on! *Shamrock*

Further Thoughts:

O'Sullivan actually blasted off to outer space to land on another planet and bring all of his knowledge about St. Patrick, Christianity, parades, and all things green to the inhabitants. He did a fine job in the explaining department.

Parting Thoughts:

Your poem flowed smoothly and rhymed just right. *Rolling* I enjoyed the transformation of the aliens. They really got the St. Patrick's Day spirit and even began to dance arm in arm while turning from their alien-grey skin color to bright green! *AlienG*

Conclusion:

Well done! And ,lots of fun to picture in my mind's eye. Yup, it will be highlighted on the 3/17 Comedy Newsletter. *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there vim0325
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy Genre page. *Bigsmile*

*Rolling* Oh, my, this is so funny! I could picture the whole baby delivery drama with a husband who let's just say, has a weak stomach around blood.

Birthing is not without some messy stuff happening. And, yes, years ago the husband always remained outside the delivery room process and anxiously waited in a room with other dads wondering if they would be the dad of a girl or a boy. Yeah, they weren't doing sonograms back then! It truly was a mystery until the actual birth.

I congratulate your hubby for lasting it out and even being convinced to cut the cord. *Laugh*

*BabyGirl* I am highlighting this story in the 3/17 Comedy Newsletter. It falls with the theme of deliveries -- although not quite the same type of delivery, but humorous enough to have its spot in the newsletter. *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Prosperous Snow celebrating
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your it because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

The Hands of Time:

Your title and brief description made me want to read the poem and see just where time would take me.

Minutes Pass:

You hit an interesting topic about clock watching. I know it's easy to feel like time has seemed to slow down or even stop momentarily. It seems we can drift off into a world totally unrelated to the clock. It's as if the digits turn and we are lost in thoughts and surprised to find that ten minutes have already passed. I get tuned into time when it's close to 11:11. I am always reminded of my mother at that time. She loved 11:11! I try to watch for it and spend a minute talking to her
 and remembering beautiful times. Then I realize that 11:09 is now 11:13 and I totally missed her favorite time. It makes me a little upset that I drifted away in my mind rather than spending that special minute with her memory. Then I realize that I was already thinking about her and enjoying fond memories while the minutes rolled on.

Time's Gears:

Gears of time keep moving forward. Your poem brought in the sense of time from a clock watcher's point of view. Your free verse poem moved along as rhythmically as hands on a clock. I found no gear-grinding nor batter hiccup along the way. It is a poem that makes one stop and think and realize others do look at time but sometimes don't see that which is right in the face of the clock. Whatever the reason there is a time loss, time stops for no one.

Wake Up:

In the end, time is infinite. It is both calming and nerve-wracking depending on what is to be done at a certain time. The fact is, whether time is forgotten or set to an alarm, it continues whether we watch it or not.

I'm Off the Clock:

I do enjoy your poetry. Some really make me stop and think. They have a philosophical feel about them. *Thinker*

So all I can say is ... Well done! *Clock*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because I was perusing the Comedy Genre to find some goodies for an upcoming Comedy Newsletter. *Bigsmile*

My Initial Impressions:

The title caught my attention, immediately! Being an expert in Amazon ordering, I was convinced this read would be right up my alley. However, since I don't have an alley cat, I was going to be heading into deep Amazon secret deliveries! *Ha*

Further Impressions:

Oh, my, this is going to be some treat to read! I hadn't decided yet if it was going to be about "cat treats" or "dog treats." Simply put, it was a treat to read! *Laugh* Did I mention my love for 2-day Prime delivery? *Delight*

This poem painted some pictures in my mind's eye. The couple walking their Basset Hound lazily through the picturesque are with cobblestone paths. The dog sniffing along, picking up a familiar doggy-treat scent that makes her tail wag in joy as the UPS truck comes into view. *Dog1**Cat*

Heart Stopping Moment:

"Kitty cat with a present
Giving us a bit of fright!"

*Mouse* When I think of a cat with a present, I assume it is something of the rodent variety. *Sick* However, I was proven wrong to my delight. *Delight*

Parting Thoughts:

This was such an amusing poem especially when one reads between the lines and can actually picture both animal and human characters. I like that it had hidden surprises that led to a sweet and satisfying ending.

Good job! In fact, it will be highlighted in next week's Comedy Newsletter. It does fit into the Amazon delivery theme of it! *Laugh*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello there, Jeff
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy Genre pages. The title drew me in because it fell with the theme of my upcoming Comedy Newsletter. *Bigsmile*

First Impression:

This would be a fast, and humorous piece. It's a limerick, this prone to a bit of quirky comedy. I like that!

Further Impressions:

I wasn't disappointed as it pulled in one of my favorite ways of shopping -- Amazon! Ordering an item from Timbuktu, could be quite difficult for Prime shoppers in the States, to get their item within two days. *Laugh*

Loved the package's travel path and the wit.

Naturally, traveling such distances via plane, train and canoe, could result in a delivery being "overdue."

Lesson learned!

If you need it fast, order close-by!

I am highlighting this little poem in next week's Comedy Newsletter. It will fit well with the newsletter's subject matter. *Bigsmile*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Masquerade  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review! *Delight*

What I liked:

I liked the dialogue between Joe and Angie. She was trying to convince him to go to their friend's masquerade party. He was not interested, but she had baited him to go convincing him he'd never be able to find her in her costume. He bit and left before her to attend the party.

Further Observations:

You get your readers wondering if Joe will really figure out which guest is his wife. We, of course were led to a twisted, surprising ending!


Observations:

By eleven thirty, though[,] Joe has [had] guessed all of his friends,


Further Observations:

"having been convicted of her murder since she was never found,"

Hmmm, My mystery brain just kicked-in. I do get that this was a Flash Fiction and had to be wrapped up quickly, but there's things to be considered in order to jump to the conclusion of murder. *Shock2*

Since there was no body found when the wife went missing, there had to be some incriminating evidence of a crime, such as her blood, on some weapon with his fingerprints, etc. It needn't be a huge explanation, but just some clues to make it more convincing.

Otherwise, this was a fine little story with a big twist at the end. It just needs a few more facts to answer a reader's questions about his conviction.

Poor Joe!!! *Laugh*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering February's Slam Cupid, Intentionally bad poetry. The object of this contest is to write the worst poetry possible to get the coveted 1-star rating. *Bigsmile*


My First Impression:

I liked the title, "Conjured Heartbreak." I entered the poem with visions of some really horrible Cupid Slamming about to happen. *Shock2*

Further Impressions:

I couldn't help myself. I had to read and reread this poem trying to find something to sink my teeth into that would grab me in a way to deal out a one-star. This is the purpose of the contest. However, I found there was so much saving grace, so well-penned and filled with imagery, I just didn't have the heart to down-rate this poem.

It really is a good poem! Dark, as love can have a darker side that doesn't involve the Cupid arrow. It shows many points (not arrows) about the disappointment of love and the heartbreak.

Did I miss something? This poem is well crafted and rather deep. Much more so than Cupid deserves.

My Dilemma:

I know the object of this contest is to find the baddest of the bad out of available 1-star ratings, but I think this poem deserves better ratings. If it were to be covered with 1-star ratings, it would have a difficult time recovering. And I repeat, it's much better than a 1-star rating. The ratings you have brought it up to 3-stars, far removed from the needed 1-star. I think it's better than 3 stars (average), so my rating should get it lifted a bit for you.

So, not to pull down your ratings any more, I am giving this a 5-star rating for being a fine poem that allows the reader to actually feel the emotions that come through woven within the lines. It did not truly "Slam" Cupid as it took a more serious path. It is dark, but well-written. Cupid does make a showing but merely as a character for whom one blames when love turns bad, not the sickly-sweet character we imagine during this contest. *HeartBroken*

Thank you again for entering the contest. We Slam Cupid annually in February. Do join in, again. *Smile*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Cupid Plucks  
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
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Hello there, Words Whirling 'Round
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Bigsmile*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our February SLAM CUPID, 1-STAR Poetry Month prompt!

Initial Impressions:

Loved the first lines with the rhythmic rhyme and use of alliteration. I knew at that moment the rest of the poem would be a fun read. Good way to hook a reader! *Bigsmile*

Further Thoughts:

This poem was quick and quirky and totally falls within giving Cupid the old Slam! It was a humorous read all the way until the end.

Parting Thoughts:

Got a kick out of this:
"Candy, gifts, and banjo muse all failed to impress her
but still his urges Rose again, Beau wanted to undress her." *Rolling*

Conclusion:

Your intentionally bad poem did what it intended to do -- it was awfully bad, yet terribly good at producing images in the mind of the reader about Cupid and Rose. The one with the thorns beats the one with an arrow who can't put his hands on his thorny love interest! *Laugh*

As you might guess, it is a difficult job for the judges to pore through the pits of Hades to find the best of the worst. Yup, it's a tough job, but somebody's got to do it!

Good luck with the contest!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of A letter to Cupid  
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Rated: E | (1.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Sumojo
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thanks for entering February's Slam Cupid, intentionally bad poetry contest, where one-star is coveted. *Bigsmile*

Initial Impression?

*Rolling**Rolling*

Further Thoughts:

Okay, this was a cleverly crafted version of bad-poetry, whereas the reader seems to be lulled into the warmth of lovely rhyming couplets only to be smacked alongside the sleeping mind and pulled into reality.

It takes a trained bad-poetry mind to sift through the smoke screen and see the BAD! *Shock2*

This is a bad-poetry contest prompt. Despite the cute couplets about modern day dating online, which should be a real lesson for Cupid to learn, the one-star rating wormed its way through to my brain. I mean, that is the purpose of the Slam Cupid, contest, right? *Smirk*

Parting Thoughts:

So, although I hate to have to break apart the lovely shiny stars you got ... I just can't resist giving this the coveted badge of honor ... 1-Star! *Star* This is why the contest exists, is it not? *Smirk2*

As you might realize, it's difficult for us judges to find the baddest of the bad that is also soooooo good in its badness. *Ha*

Good Luck!

Until next time--Slam On! *Smirk2*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Prosperous Snow celebrating
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thanks for entering our Slam Cupid contest in February! *Bigsmile*

What I loved:

I loved the various rhyme schemes within the lines of the poem. It is great to think outside the box, yet try to keep the flow and rhyme captivating! *Think*

Also Loved:

The horribleness of being caught up within intentionally bad poetry!

This was fun to read and also let out an audible Groan.

Observation:
A little typo? Perhaps part of the being bad, but in case not I highlighted it. *Wink*
"Go ahead a[nd] sue me, if you must."

Parting Thoughts:

You had me hooked at this line:

"I know your love interest isn't a dog!
Lady, it isn't my fault you kissed a frog!"

Good one! *Laugh*

This poem is bad, really bad. I'm surprised it got such high ratings! *Shock2*

As you know, it is a difficult job for us judges to pore through the bottom of the pit to choose the very worst of the worst. *Headbang*

Good luck with the contest! *Rabbit2*

Until next time -- Slam On ... or not. Must save up some more bad stuff for next February, too! *Ha*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Swinging Fairy  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello there, Princess Megan Rose 22 Years
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review.*Smile*

I love the magical quality of your prose-poem. You describe the fairy and the little creatures sitting on her lap on the swing. They are good friends and love nature and the beauty of their surroundings.

The cat and the bunny get along just fine in this fairy's world. They can share a space on her lap without fighting.

You filled the reader's mind with fantasy of a perfect world. The colors and gardens and trees all come to life with the swing on the tree and the red-haired fairy and her friends.

Loved the images at the bottom of the poem. They fit beautifully within your descriptive lines.

Well done! *Fairy*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Princess Zelda
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest" Thank you for entering our January photo prompt contest. *Bigsmile*

First Impression:

I loved your title! Beauty in the Bleakness.That really does reach out and get the reader's attention. I love that you chose to point out that even in the bleakness of winter there is some beauty that is mesmerizing. I loved watching the snowfall from the comfort of my hearth and home. I hated the aftermath of having to shovel out my walkway. *Laugh* Now, I spend winters in Florida and look at wintry pictures sent from New England, have a momentary missing of the snow, and quickly get over it as the sun warms my skin and the ocean waves crash ashore. *Ha*

Further Impressions:

Your poem was very succinct, well-balanced in the rhythm department and yet, managed to paint a huge picture for the reader to view. I saw the falling snow flakes, it took me back to those wintry times, years ago.

Loved This Line:

"You choose not to be brooding and bitter,"

"Brooding" "bitter" Great combining of words for impact.

Parting Thoughts:

I enjoyed your poem and your interpretation of the Photo Prompt.

Well done! *SuitDiamond*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*



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Rated: E | (4.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there brom21
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our January Photo Prompt. *Bigsmile*

Initial Impressions:

You opted for the short story rather than poetry based on the prompt. Your story would lead your reader to someplace frosty yet magical!

Further Impressions:

The characters could be pictured in the mind's eye because the descriptions made it easy to do so.

Observation:

Griselda tried to reach out but she could [not] move.

Suggestion:

I know there was a 2000 Word Count limit. However, I think this story could have been tightened-up a bit. There was a lot of busyness surrounding the story. I know Griselda was compelled to find her brother and save him. I think the beginning of the story needed to move on quicker. Introduce her father and that Nathan's missing and it would be futile to go after him. Get her on her journey sooner, perhaps add more layers to the travels and develop more of the magic involved, the locket and Sulta.

Further Thoughts:

One little photo brought action, adventure and love of family and specifically, Griselda's love for her brother and his safety. She had an ability to hear his cries for help after he disappeared, and knew she had to save him no matter how dangerous it would be.

She's a likeable character who put her life on the line for her family. Her brother Nathan? Not such a person of good integrity. He was willing to sell-out for fortune and power. Nevertheless, he saw the mess he was in and had to face the consequences. Of course, his sister protected him and family's good name.

Parting Thoughts:

This was quite an interesting take on the prompt. In the end, it is a story about one sibling's loyalty to the other, and great bravery.

Well done! *CastleRight*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Winter Impact  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, jaya

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our January picture prompt contest! *Bigsmile*

Initial Impressions:

I love the vision you painted in my mind of one looking outside the window while the cold snap of winter made its presence known.

Further Impressions:

I love how you twist it up a bit by describing palm trees in the Caribbean, the ultimate picture of warmth and sunshine, its beckoning beauty calling out to visitors to come join in the fun. However, the reader is reminded it is winter's frosty chill that really exists at the moment of looking outside that window."


Observation:

"a pictures of palm fringed-"


Parting Thoughts:

"a vista of reposing beauty"
"ensconced in the warm interior"
"not ostentatious, nor flaunted"

Beautifully penned words that weave the scenario together effortlessly. The home is warm and cozy and the exterior is icy and hazardous, symbolizing two totally different states of being from one side of the glass to the other.


Well done! *SuitDiamond*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Redtowrite
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering the January picture prompt contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

The reader can glean by the title and brief description that this poem would fall into the darker side of life as 2021 approached. It brings about questions of whether there would be a more joyful year ahead, or would the discontent linger through another year. "Deathly quiet" sends chills up the spine. When thoughts of the past year flash back to being locked down and missing out on friendly, human contact due to the Corona Virus, one can't help but interpret it as a deathly quiet that can strike anytime and change the lives of families forever.


Loved these lines:

"Memories hang in icy air.
One last cold breath."

Very strong descriptions. They have impact adding to the depth of darkness and despair of the loss of so much.


Observations:

Green grass is gone to stay. A little confusing "gone to stay" I think you mean it won't return but it does make me pause. *Think* [Perhaps "green grass is gone away?"]

"Lost loved one by one." [lost loves? or lost lovers?]

Parting Thoughts:

Your poem hit on the icy image that was the prompt and magnified the darkness and chills, left behind of those hiding within the confines of their homes.

Much to ponder from these lines!

Well done! *PenP*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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