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#4645470

Review of A Jingle Belle Christmas

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello there!

I am ԜԜ On The Road Again!

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Initial Thoughts:

It has a holiday theme and romance plus comedy -- what could be more of a pull for a reader?
Further Impressions:

I was surprised and I must say pleased at the same time to notice the dividing the story by chapters. It still fit within the word count rule. It was indeed a short story. I questioned myself about the connection between the story and the photo prompt, but I imagine the bright lights were supposed to take place during the concert that the reader finds out about once it has passed.

Loved the fact that the grandma found herself a love interest. Love can happen later on in life.

Observation:

"When is it? I'd be happy to pitch in," Belle answered with a smile. "When is it?" No need to repeat this question as it was already asked at the beginning.

Conclusion:

It was a sweet story with much conflict tossed into it. Lanie had a secret that had to come out even if the man she loved would never forgive her. He did of course, and love would blossom.

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
Web~Witch

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#4645469

Review of The Aliens Above Them

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Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

Hello there!

I am ԜԜ On The Road Again!

reviewing your story as a judge for the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest

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Initial Impressions:

An invasion of some kind appears to be taking place in Lattan.

I know it's going to be a wild ride and wanted to know what the story would unfold for me.

Further Impressions:

Explosions are happening, nobody know where the next one will be, but they show up during a "visit" from another planet.

It is disclosed that the Law Enforcers are the bad guys in the mix. Hearrol and Jakoline put their heads together to try to prevent the takeover. It appears that the visitors have some sort of mind-control abilities, but are unable to fight back with weapon power that the other side has.

Observations:

"If he is going to place the explosive here soon, he’s going to need to do it before too much longer."

This sentence above is a bit wordy.

TRY: If he is going to place the explosives here, he's going to have to do it soon.

Especially in a short story with a strict word count, you want to write a bit tighter. The sentence highlighted above is one with an easy fix -- cut away the repetitive part. There are more parts of the story that could use a bit of tightening up as well.

Parting Thoughts:

I found I had to reread the story to get a better picture of what was going on and which group was the "bad guy." Probably you were running out of the word count limit and had to wrap it up concisely.

It has a vivid message once the reader pictures the explosions and the need for one side to control the other.

Conclusion:

Unique story and use of the picture prompt!

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
Web~Witch

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#4645468

Review of The Rapper

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello there!

I am ԜԜ On The Road Again! reviewing your story as a judge for the
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Initial Impressions:

This is going to be a story about the band. They are an up and coming Rapp group practicing in the parents' basement. They are noisy and irritating to the parents. The son is told to get a job, basically.

Further Impressions:

Youth does come with its growing pains because they think what they have to offer in the music world is fresh and will be a success.

Loved the whole sneak trip to audition on Australia's Got Talent. They were convinced they would advance to the finals once heard.

Parting Thoughts:

I found this story humorous as I pictured the group with stars in their eyes heading up on stage to perform and when done with they thought was the best they've ever done, were told "Sorry, not this time." Oh, the shock of it all!

Conclusion:

It's good to see Greg found a job. He could sing lyrics in his head while earning a paycheck.

Nice touch with the newest lyrics shown at the end of the story. It made me chuckle.

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
Web~Witch

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#4645467

Review of Kiss the Devil

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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First Impressions:

Paris as a backdrop and romance. What better mix?

Further Impressions:

Tom fell in love with Marie Clair and she with him. He enjoyed her French style and personality. The attended a concert she wanted to go to.

Tom was a Godly man who believed in heaven and hell, while Marie was more or less a non-believer.

Tom could get by putting that aside presently if there were not a terrorist attack within the music hall. They escaped with their lives thanks to Tom's previous war experience.

It was the pivotal point that made Tom turn away from Marie, because he realized that his faith was more important than falling for a woman who took him to a concert that appeared to be hailing the devil.

Parting Thoughts:

As fate would have it he was brought back to the town to testify after he had separated from Marie for years. The old flame sparked, but more so, he realized Marie had found faith after their separation.

Conclusion:

Nice budding romance with its conflicts and resolutions. Sometimes years change everyone's world in ways that make them look through more focused eyes.

You wove in some realistic images of the times with the Covid mask being removed at the end. Could it have been better as a novella with a higher word count? I believe so, since there were many facets to be developed with the characters. We readers get a brief glimpse of what really makes them who they are.

Ending had a certain satisfaction, albeit wrapped up a bit quick.

However, I guess life has been a harsh battle the past couple years and it's good to find a happy ending.

Well done!

Regards,
Web~Witch

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#4642402

Review of Red Nuts Roasting

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama

Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our December Holiday Song, parody prompt.

First Impressions:

It's gonna get hot in here! I detected an adult theme.

Further Impressions:

You went with an adult version of the Christmas Song, otherwise identified as Chestnuts Roasting On An Open Fire. That's fine, we have no rating limit, here. You took that song and made it your own.

It was painful at times.

Just the thought of roasted red nuts, rashes from spandex, gyms?!!! Yes, painful way to try to get together with a girlfriend.

The rhythm was as smooth as the salve used to calm the itch.

Conclusion:

You followed the rules. You chose a song from the prompt's list and --YOU made it your own!

Good job!

Until Next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4642400

Review of Oh, Daddy, Let's Go Downtown!

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello there Dave

This is a Bitem:army} Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at The Bard's Hall. Thank you for entering our December, Holiday Song Parody, contest.

First Impressions:

I see you used "Baby It's cold outside" as your choice. I liked your version.

Further Observations:

I could actually place your lyrics right to the tune. That's a good thing. The Rhythm moved along smoothly.

Parting Thoughts:

I love seeing the holidays through the eyes of a child. Here, it is obvious that her mother has passed away, and the dad tried to make it special even though his heart was aching for her and how much she loved the glitter and special celebrations of the time of year.

Beautiful, heartwarming and heart wrenching at the same time.

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4642317

Review of Christmas Song Parody

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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Review!

I am also reviewing your entry as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering December's Holiday Parody, prompt.

Initial Impressions:

Rules were followed
Song chosen from the prompt's list
You made it your own!

Further Impressions:

I know this song and immediately began to sing along to it with your lyrics. They were fun and paint a huge image of all the hustle and bustle of holiday shopping time.

Additional Thoughts:

I found the lyrics to be fun and as mentioned produced images in my mind of Christmases long ago,

I did find a pause or two along the way when I was singing the lyrics in my mind. Could just be my singing, though.

Parting Thoughts:

You did a lovely job of taking an old favorite and making it new again!

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4642309

Review of Drivin' in a WInter Wonderland

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello there catdok

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama

Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering December's holiday song parody!

Initial Impressions:

The song is locked in my mind and I'm ready to sing along with it!

Further Impressions:

You dick a fine job matching your lyrics along to the original music. It was easy to follow along with the words in your version.

Additional Observations:

Rules were followed, you took a classic holiday song and made it your own.

Parting Thoughts:

Parodies are always so tough to judge. They are unique and each has a layer of lyrics that take the mind's eye in another direction. I've enjoyed driving in YOUR winter wonderland --with white knuckles on the steering wheel!

Conclusion:

I enjoyed the imagery I conjured up and, especially, the humor!

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4642306

Review of I'm Beginning to Get a Migraine Headache

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama

Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering December's Holiday song parody, prompt.

Initial Impressions:

I could follow along with the original song, so that's a good thing! You brought the Holiday spirit to life with a personal twist --AKA, you made the song your own!

Further Thoughts:

The rules were followed and the humorous life experiences seemed to flow from your lyrics. Hate migraines!

Parting Thoughts:

These parody contests are always tough to judge. Each one has a its own personal flair. I've really enjoyed reading and singing to your version!

Thanks again!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4642305

Review of Choppin' in a Baseball Hinterland

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama

Review! {e:angelic{

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our Holiday song parody, contest in December.

What I liked:

You followed rules, you chose a holiday song from the list in the prompt and -- most importantly, you made it your own.

Further Impressions:

Great rhythm and Rhyme
I could follow the original son with your lyrics

Parting Thoughts:

These parodies are always tough to choose from with all the entries. Sometimes, it's a matter of too close to call -- then I look at the date the entry was entered in the contest.

This one had its uniqueness, for sure!

Thank you, again!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4640993

Review of Fantasy Werewolf

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

I like your fantasy werewolf. Amanda did a great job bringing this image to life. It is very cool, indeed!

I'm so happy to know that the gift certificate gifted to you as a winner at "The Witch's Garden "

was used, and you got something you really like.

Happy Holidays!

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#4636898

Review of Chocolate Lover’s Feast

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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Review!

I am also reviewing your poem because it popped up on the random Read & Review!

Initial Impressions:

You really pull your reader right into your poem with your title and brief description. Yum!!!

Chocolate is the sinful delight of many.

Further Thoughts:

Excellent weaving of words!

Lush
Echoes of Eden
Sweet temptation
beckons
sinfully rich

Perfect word use to stir the palate of the mind. I was actually picturing some old time favorite chocolates in their wrappers. Delightful!

Parting Thoughts:

I loved the poetic form, it didn't need rhyme because it had its own melodious rhythm. Sweet and easy flow!

Conclusion:

Great job filling my mind with chocolates!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4636687

Review of Chaos Personified

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello there, Sherasi Welcome to WDC!

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the Random Read & Review!

Initial Impressions:

Your title and brief description told me this was going to be a serious subject matter. So, I buckled myself in, and began to read your poem.

Further Thoughts:

I was actually quite surprised with the read. You envelop the entirety of having to deal with autistic children, and the din of more than one being themselves in any given day.

Surprising because you managed to capture the feelings of a mother's fortitude in so few words.

Additional Impressions:

Loved the word choices used to produce a profound impact in the reader's mind. Pictures formed before my eyes and I felt as if I had visited your home briefly and captured a glimpse of living with autism.

Parting Thoughts:

Strong words

Picturesque images left to the reader's imagination

Conclusion:

A very strong, patient and loving mother guides them and protects them while tending to their every need.

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4636496

Review of What the Wind Blew In

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hello there Graywriter
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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our October Prompt, Something Horror Contest.

Initial Impressions:

Great title to prepare a reader for a cold and stormy evening.
Brief description -- appealing spot for an author's imagination. Nothing like a cabin nestled in solitude during a blizzard to kick in the muse.

Further Impressions:

Good build-up of suspense with the noises, crunching snow, lights going out and inexplicable noises at the door. Creepy factor is getting serious, now!

I enjoyed the descriptions, the crunching, crackling and roaring of the fire burning within the pot belly stove. It set the mood nicely.

The door bursting open and the struggle to shut it, and the arrival of a teen girl warming herself by the stove.

Her narrative explains what took place and why she ended up in that particular cabin.

Parting Thoughts:

My heart felt the girl's fear and yet her happiness as her beloved pet had returned to join her on their spiritual journey together.

Conclusion:

The ending was bittersweet yet satisfying because the writer was witness to a great reuniting of a girl and her dog, and wonderful warmth and peaceful resolve.

Good job!

Until next time--write on ...Haunt on!

Regards
WebWitch

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#4636407

Review of When the wind wailed

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our Something Horror, contest!

Initial Impressions:

"the souls drifted" I love that description!

"When the world wailed" Excellent start-line for a ghost story.

Further Impressions:

You get your reader absorbed int the story, and the ghostly happenings. The descriptions bring the reader right into the setting. It's a great way to allow the chills to creep up the spine.

Rules Followed?

Yes, you wrote a ghost story as per the prompt.
You placed the word count within.

Parting Thoughts:

Your story evokes many emotions. The spirited souls trapped where they dies in a fire set by those who were envious, and of the upper caste system.

Conclusion:

You wrapped up the story in a satisfying way. Stuck it to the upper caste and released the souls from their earthly prison.

Good job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4632964

Review of Bardstown Misplaces A Bus

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello SandraLynn Team Florent!
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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our Cop Shop Mystery in September.

Initial Impressions:

The beginning of your story jumps right into action as the mayor is accosted by the fired choir master Letzall Singh.

Further Observations:

I liked the intensity of it as the characters jumped in to help find the busload of students in the band and choir.

Reported as "sleeping it off" by the ruthless ex-choir master.

Intensity Continues!

The bus is found, the students are all fine and indeed sleeping off the affects of being drugged by Letzall Singh -- a very determined man wanting revenge due to his firing. So bad is this guy, he even offed his accomplice, the bus driver, Ralph Cramptin!

Rules Followed?

You indeed solved the mystery in 21 intense sentences!

Well ... "What's the problem, WebWitch — you saw something that's out of place?"

Yup!

September Entry was modified on October 1st, thus disqualifying the entry.

You did a beautiful job, but couldn't resist the urge to edit something. I wonder what it was that needed immediate editing?

So sorry, SandraLynn! I did enjoy your mystery solving! Hope to see you back next year, when you'll get 22 sentences to solve the mystery.

Until next time--write on ... But watch that edit date.

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4632884

Review of Cop Shop Mystery

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hello there, NeedingBeachDuf 🐠⛵🏝️
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama

Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our Cop Shop Mystery in September.

Initial Impressions:

You let the reader know early on who the culprit is. Also, the fact that the bus driver, Ralph Cramptin has a bit of an ogling problem. Not a good thing to have when driving a busload of band players and choral group, as well as an attractive music director.

Further Observations:

You followed the rules, mystery solved in 21 sentences exactly.

Additional Observations:

The story feels a little rushed. We don't really get to know the tension of it all, as Ralph was on automatic pilot as he continued catching glimpses of the music director.

Parting Thoughts:

I wondered why Ralph's boss felt responsible for his lack of attention, and his following another bus to another town.

I also wondered why the music director didn't speak-up when she noticed he took a wrong turn. After all, whether it was his job to drive them there or not, I'm sure she had a vested interest as director of the best band around to get to their destination on time.

Conclusion:

Kudos to you for solving a Bardstown mystery in 21 sentences! This is no small victory!

Nice job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4632789

Review of Left in the Dust

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hello there, Graywriter
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Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our Cop Shop Mystery prompt in September!

Initial Impressions:

A good set-up to the solving of the mystery of the disappearing bus. Fast moving story with some humor woven within.

Further Impressions:

I liked the mystery being disguised on a road under construction. Good explanation of why nobody saw the bus disappear.

Rules Followed?
You indeed solved the mystery in exactly 21 sentences.
Placed sentence count in the item.

Parting Thoughts:

You solved the mystery from your own observations so the reader knew what happened to the busload of band and coral members and could follow it to its logical conclusion.

I'm happy the students were not injured in the accident and that the cause of their disappearance was not abduction by aliens!

Conclusion:

Another Cop Shop Mystery solved!

Good job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4628987

Review of The Trinity

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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Review!

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the random R&R.

This was a very interesting Acrostic, it has much appeal for one who likes spiders and especially webs. They don't call me WebWitch for nothing.

Form:

Acrostic, spelling "Writhing Decathlon.

Rhythm & Rhyme

Well-balanced and a smooth read.

Further Observations:

I loved the personal story woven within the lines. The pictures came to life of the trinity, of Hubby, muse and Spider-girl.

It was a lovely tribute to a man who is supportive of your writing and encouraging her muse to fly freely -- I'd say like a gossamer taking to the wind.

The words were well chosen for the picturesque emphasis and the tone's impact on the reader.

Parting Thoughts:

I really enjoyed this oldie but goody. So happy it popped up for a read.

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4627288

Review of MY STORY

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello Monty
This is a Simply Positive Review!

I am also reviewing this item because I saw it posted on the Newsfeed. I knew you had a long history with this wonderful site and felt compelled to read your words.

I must say you brought tears to my eyes. Giving tribute, not only to our founders, SM and SMs, but also to members I fondly remember and miss very much.

I am so happy you decided to keep coming back here after you took care of your medical issues. The place would not be the same without you!

The Traditional Poetry Group, has been a staple on this site--even throughout the passing of the contest ot a member who isn't here, anymore, and then to SHERRI GIBSON.before it got back to you, again.

Sherri was really a special person and I miss her very much. Gone too soon, but she wrote books and left behind a piece of her love of this place and her writings. I have a few of her books, and cherish them because they are a part of her spirit which lives on in our hearts.

COUNTRYMOM-JUST REMEMBER ME was a treasure, here. I miss her, too. Like her handle says --she will be remembered here by those of us whose path she crossed and with it, brought kindness and thoughtful advice along with her.

It was so lovely reading your thoughts and tributes, Monty, on this 21st birthday of WDC.

Write on, sweet man!

Webbie

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#4627140

Review of Dr. Whoa-ha’s Spiritual Treatment

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Rated: 13+

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Hello there, Kotaro
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama

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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our August Steam Punk Contest.

Initial Impressions:

Fraud on a train! Steampunk with a villain to catch and some humor to be expected since the comedy genre was included in the description. I was settling in on the train for the long-haul with this one!

Characters:

The likes of Dr. Whoa-ha (First clue this would contain humor)as the fraudster

Detective Brewers (necessary to capture the fraudulent medical doc.)

Mr. Querty the Railroad mogul(Another chuckle here), but then somebody's got to get scammed, might as well have deep pockets!

The characters were enjoyable in their dialogue.

Further Impressions:

Loved, "a compass glued to a copper pretzel out of his bag and placed it on Qwerty’s chest."

"You have an inflammation of the interior inferior colonnade. Perhaps the articular pivotals on your dialectal pinions have been infected via snails.”

Parting Thoughts:

Contest Rules?

Steam Punk, hero, villain on steam locomotive

Word Count posted

Conclusion:

The ending was fabulous! What a great twist of fate for fraud attempt. Can't fool an old pro!

I had so much fun reading this entry, and, it has been highlighted in the current Comedy Newsletter.

Good job!

Until next time--write on!

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#4623353

Review of Puppet Master's Cnote Emporium

Review by ԜԜ On The Roa...

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Rated: E

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama

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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering July's Create a cNote Shop contest!

My Impressions:

Your shop was filled with delightful images and messages to bring a smile to the recipients' face.

They include:

Friendship

Easter

Valentine's Day

Encouragement

All of these messages are well-thought out and make each note very special.

The colors, and the cuteness of roses, butterfly and seaside are awesome!

Adorable red panda, orcas and dolphins plus the sweet bunny popped out and begged to be sent!

Good job creating an all occasion cNote Shop!

Thanks again for entering contest.

Until next time--write and create on!

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#4623342

Review of Lilli's All-Occasion C-Notes

Review by ԜԜ On The Roa...

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Rated: E

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Hello there, Lilli 🧿 ☕
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama

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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"

Thank you for entering our July Create a CNote Shop contest!

My Impressions:

These notes are a wonderful combination of greetings to please the receiver.

Inspirational with the "Fallen Tree" note. The tree is laying down (down) but alive (not out).

Thoughtful, caring supportive sympathy cNote.

Hilarious message ... "Cheer up buttercup" one. Loved it!

Playful and funny is the Chimpanzee -- just asking to be sent!

So sweet ... the cuteness of the child with flowers!

Creative hand language -- finger faces! Great friendship note!

A well-developed cNote shop that is pleasing to the eye and memorable!

Thanks again for entering the contest!

Until next time--write and create on!

Regards,
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#4621872

Review of Under the Mango Tree

Review by ԜԜ On The Roa...

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Rated: 13+

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Hello there, THANKFUL SONALI Now What?

I am reviewing your entry as a judge at:

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Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest

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#1207944 by Writing.Com Support

Thank you for entering the June Quotation Inspiration Prompt!

My First Impression:

Loved the title, "Under the Mango Tree."

My mind went to a tropical zone with a plentiful rainy season. Here,in this story, I would of be brought to India.

I'm always excited to read about life and customs in another continent.

Further Impressions:

You tell a beautiful story that touches the heart and also introduces the reader to marriage customs and how families arrange for a couple to be life partners--or as the author's note states, beyond this life's path and to another, keeping the bong of love alive. It's a lovely way to picture such endless affection. Of course that would work much better if the partner in life is a mutual love to start off the marriage.

Thank goodness there was a young cousin in the background who could step perfectly into the reluctant bride-to-be's shoes and marry the man that clearly was meant to belong with her.

The scene of a double wedding under a bountiful mango tree plays magically upon the mind's eye. Being in Florida half a year with a lush mango tree next door, I could almost pick up the sweet scent in the gently breeze of this image.

Additional Thoughts:

This story was based on the Susan Branch Quote, "I could never in a hundred summers get tired of this."

I loved the way you wove this quote into lyrics to follow along with the future groom's flute playing.

Technique for this was well-orchestrated, as the line was repeated several times at key moments during the story. It was a song awaiting a happy ending in order to be completed.

Conclusion:

Rules for the contest followed:

The Quotation Prompt was handily woven into your story.
Word count shown and within the required word count limit.

I found no grammatical errors that jumped out at me.

Good job! And good luck with the contest!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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#4621871

Review of Camila and Francisco

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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Thank you for entering the June Quotation Inspiration Prompt!

Initial Thoughts:

This is your opening paragraph:

"How could I have fallen so low? thought Camila Condo. I was, just last month, one of the foremost beauties of high Mexican society. I am blind as a bat since the explosion, and my lawyers, whom I trusted and thought friends, have taken every penny from me. Oh God in Heaven what is to become of me? It was half a prayer and half a cry of desperation."

It does give the reader some history on Camila's predicament. However, this is the beginning of your story. You want to pull the reader in and tighten it up a little so we the readers want to move on to see what happens to this poor woman."

TRY: Camila, once a high society, Mexican beauty queen, had hope of her life returning to normal. The explosion left her blind and broke. She was now completely alone in the world.
This is just a quick rewrite to show you how many words you could have saved and still have given the reader enough to understand the tone of the story and be anxious to find out what will happen next to Camila.

Further Thoughts:

I like the characters Camila, Francesco. Also his sisters, although they are not named, their actions are described in a way that the reader can get a clear picture of them. I like that they are joyful, sing, laugh and seem quite loving toward the new guest.

I love that Camila found where true beauty does exist. It's not on the outside but within the character and heart and goodness flowing forth from within a person.

Observations:

Punctuation/Break up Sentence length.

After finishing they were all going swimming in the mountain lake and on such a hot day as this there was nothing better as the waters in the lake were cool from having flowed from inside the heart of the mountain.

The above sentence could use some commas to separate the wall of words. Also, it could be divided into a couple sentences, so it doesn't make the reader feel breathless rushing through it, because there are no places to pause.

Parting Thoughts:

It's quite a lovely story that incorporates the Contest prompt, a quote from Susan Branch, "I could never in a hundred summers get tired of this."

Your conclusion was a satisfying one for the reader. Beauty and the Beast? I think it's more to me, like, Outer beauty meets inner beauty." However one describes it, the ending was a pleasant one!

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch

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