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Online journal capturing the moment and the memory of moments. A meadow meditation. |
Obviously, I'm thinking about Oriental Poetry and Tinker ![]() ![]() "I think I've written too much maybe... and then I write more. Six months of going nowhere... even my Muse wants to travel." Above comment I left for SusanFarmer ![]() ![]() So my response above was 29 syllables ... easier to expand to 31 then clip to 17. [scribbles on paper] scribbles on paper snail-etched — now black swans racing across a blank screen six months of going nowhere — even my Muse craves travel © Kåre Enga [177.227] (16.september.2020) So I write a tanka (English syllables 5/7/5 7/7). Concrete images in the first part; a response in the second. "Screen" is a modern word. "Sky" would be too cliche imho. If an image of a computer screen were used then "sky" would be better. See: haiga, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiga Further notes gleaned from the internet: http://abritishprofinjapan.blogspot.com/2017/06/rain-snails-Japanese-animal-name... Snail is "katatsumuri (カタツムリ), is usually written in katakana but does have kanji (蝸牛)." https://wkdkigodatabase03.blogspot.com/2007/03/snail-katatsumuri.html Perhaps an image of rainy season? (summer = May, June, July) Black swan = hakuchoo (any season) Seasonal words (kigo): http://www.2hweb.net/haikai/renku/500ESWd.html Also: https://youngleaves.org/?page_id=98 https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_kigo https://worldkigodatabase.blogspot.com/search?updated-max=2013-12-29T03:50:00%2B... 104,591 |