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Le Voyage Magnifique

by Dave

Rated: 18+ · Book · Writing · #1236257

A log of the magnificent journey across the vast sea of my imagination.

A sig awarded for winning "The Anything Goes Poetry Contest"

A log of our magnificent journey.

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StephBee - House Targaryen

Dec 7, 2023 at 9:47pm
In response to "Thanksgiving Restoration"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Henry van Dyke, the progresses from feeling, to expression to action inspired by a thanksgiving gathering.

WHAT I LIKED

I like how each stanza started with "I'm thankful for..." The repetition was as soothing as the sentiments expressed.

STRUCTURE

As per the notes, this is loosely based on a monchielle styled poem.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "the smell of Grammy's turkey dressing,"

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem progresses much like van Dyke's quote, from feeling to expression to action/being in the moment of a thanksgiving gathering.

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Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

Oct 30, 2023 at 1:36am
In response to "A Halloween Celebration"

Nice rhythm and alliteration! The rhymes work as well. Edit and versify and voila... you have a free-verse poem (or a prose poem) for Shadows & Light.

My dreamy brain... ghoulish? dark? My nightmares are definitely disturbing and don't always dissipate with daylight.

Needless to say, I like it.

Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

May 19, 2023 at 9:25am
In response to "Poppies"

I do like it. The rhythm is nice. I appreciate bravery/Normandy/memory.

"because" doesn't work for me. No suggestions though.

1 Like

StephBee - House Targaryen

Jan 5, 2023 at 5:40pm
In response to "SILENT NIGHT"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM
A poem about the nature of the Christmas season.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the acrostic of "silent night" painted the beauty of winter.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. It is where the first letter of the line spell out a word or a phrase.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the poem easy to read. Good use of WDC ML.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no other suggestions. Nice word play. You can feel the weather nipping at your cheeks. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

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Dave

Jan 3, 2023 at 8:32am
In response to "The Gravel Path"

I am glad you posted this on the forum so everyone else can enjoy it.

1 Like

Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

Jan 2, 2023 at 3:37pm
In response to "The Gravel Path"

I hurry down a grovel path
to hide from mighty blokes
residing where the mountains scream
at rabid city folks.

I soothe my wounds from acid tongues
among these squirrely butts
and count my blessings every time
White Rabbit brings me nuts.

K.E.

2 Like

Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

Dec 31, 2022 at 12:04am
In response to "The Telegram"

Nicely done. Eastern Montana has a BIG sky. I live in the west snuggled between mountains.

I loved the openness of Kansas... one reason why I'm going back to Isan in Thailand. "A little bit of who I am" resonates with wide open agricultural areas.

Dave

Dec 10, 2022 at 9:12am
In response to "The Telegram"

Thanks, Kat!

1 Like

Redtowrite

Dec 10, 2022 at 8:51am
In response to "The Telegram"

Paints a breathtaking visual and a feeling of freedom and lightness from our daily troubles. Beautiful writing. Holiday peace to you.

Kat

Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

Aug 16, 2022 at 6:44pm
In response to "GETAWAY"

So many 'b's. Alliterative on purpose?

The Caymans may not be far enough away. I'd go to Thailand... easier to get lost in a sea of people. Or Colombia.

1 Like

April 25, 2021 at 10:56am

#1009096

The Dance

Originally entered in Round 84 of the "Invalid Item"

: "Invalid Post"

I listen to the breeze
imploring me to seize the chance
and join in Nature's dance
upon the broad expanse of green,
where deer and geese convene
in harmony between the hills
among the daffodils
with music from the milling bees.

Notes on the Luc Bat form of poetry ▼

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April 19, 2021 at 10:27am

#1008770

Water Lilies

Water lilies bloom
and calm a troubled pilgrim,
who wandered on scene
as they rest on quiet pond
away from the bustling crowd.

Those vibrant blossoms
resurrect a sense of worth,
so he can go on.

Notes on the Oriental Octet form of poetry ▼

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April 16, 2021 at 2:21pm

#1008626

Exploration

Exploration

The purpose of this exhortation
is to make all you writers aware
of benefits derived from exploration
beyond the realm of factual affair.

Just follow your Muse to Inspiration Station,
where one can see pixies dance in a stream,
or details of a future revelation,
caught in the camera of a dream.

1 Like • Comment

April 13, 2021 at 2:12pm

#1008453

Koel

Asian koel sings a striking melody--
lovely lilt lingering
beneath the sprawling mango tree.

The song drifts down to folks below,
coo-coo-cooing, calming,
as sunset provides a vibrant glow.

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April 5, 2021 at 6:46pm

#1007833

Our Debt

Both West Point cadet
and crafty old vet
commit

to meet ev'ry threat
without any fret.
No quit!

We are in their debt
and shall not forget
their grit.

Notes on the Lai form of poetry ▼

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