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Le Voyage Magnifique

by Dave

Rated: 18+ · Book · Writing · #1236257

A log of the magnificent journey across the vast sea of my imagination.

A sig awarded for winning "The Anything Goes Poetry Contest"

A log of our magnificent journey.

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10 Most Recent Blog Comments:

StephBee - GOT Survivor

Dec 7, 2023 at 9:47pm
In response to "Thanksgiving Restoration"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Henry van Dyke, the progresses from feeling, to expression to action inspired by a thanksgiving gathering.

WHAT I LIKED

I like how each stanza started with "I'm thankful for..." The repetition was as soothing as the sentiments expressed.

STRUCTURE

As per the notes, this is loosely based on a monchielle styled poem.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "the smell of Grammy's turkey dressing,"

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem progresses much like van Dyke's quote, from feeling to expression to action/being in the moment of a thanksgiving gathering.

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Kåre Enga in Montana

Oct 30, 2023 at 1:36am
In response to "A Halloween Celebration"

Nice rhythm and alliteration! The rhymes work as well. Edit and versify and voila... you have a free-verse poem (or a prose poem) for Shadows & Light.

My dreamy brain... ghoulish? dark? My nightmares are definitely disturbing and don't always dissipate with daylight.

Needless to say, I like it.

Kåre Enga in Montana

May 19, 2023 at 9:25am
In response to "Poppies"

I do like it. The rhythm is nice. I appreciate bravery/Normandy/memory.

"because" doesn't work for me. No suggestions though.

1 Like

StephBee - GOT Survivor

Jan 5, 2023 at 5:40pm
In response to "SILENT NIGHT"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM
A poem about the nature of the Christmas season.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the acrostic of "silent night" painted the beauty of winter.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. It is where the first letter of the line spell out a word or a phrase.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the poem easy to read. Good use of WDC ML.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no other suggestions. Nice word play. You can feel the weather nipping at your cheeks. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

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Dave

Jan 3, 2023 at 8:32am
In response to "The Gravel Path"

I am glad you posted this on the forum so everyone else can enjoy it.

1 Like

Kåre Enga in Montana

Jan 2, 2023 at 3:37pm
In response to "The Gravel Path"

I hurry down a grovel path
to hide from mighty blokes
residing where the mountains scream
at rabid city folks.

I soothe my wounds from acid tongues
among these squirrely butts
and count my blessings every time
White Rabbit brings me nuts.

K.E.

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Kåre Enga in Montana

Dec 31, 2022 at 12:04am
In response to "The Telegram"

Nicely done. Eastern Montana has a BIG sky. I live in the west snuggled between mountains.

I loved the openness of Kansas... one reason why I'm going back to Isan in Thailand. "A little bit of who I am" resonates with wide open agricultural areas.

Dave

Dec 10, 2022 at 9:12am
In response to "The Telegram"

Thanks, Kat!

1 Like

Redtowrite

Dec 10, 2022 at 8:51am
In response to "The Telegram"

Paints a breathtaking visual and a feeling of freedom and lightness from our daily troubles. Beautiful writing. Holiday peace to you.

Kat

Kåre Enga in Montana

Aug 16, 2022 at 6:44pm
In response to "GETAWAY"

So many 'b's. Alliterative on purpose?

The Caymans may not be far enough away. I'd go to Thailand... easier to get lost in a sea of people. Or Colombia.

1 Like

August 31, 2018 at 7:47pm

#940598

Our Dreams

We'll wash our dreams
in the river of life
and hang them out to dry
on the horns
of a crescent moon.

2 Like • Comment

August 31, 2018 at 9:13am

#940566

The Magic Elixir

The magic elixir
of enchanting poetry
will transfix her
with visions of Valkyrie.

Valkyrie: https://www.britannica.com/topic/Valkyrie-Norse-mythology

3 Like • Comment

August 30, 2018 at 6:22am

#940519

The Last Vestige

The last vestige of daylight
slips beneath the blanket
of eventide,
clearing stage for stars' display.

4 Like • Comment

August 28, 2018 at 6:11pm

#940455

The Washoe Zephyr

A blast of dust
sends chickens and goats
flying across the plains
as the Washoe Zephyr
comes to call.

More about the Washoe Zephyr: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bhIVzQhtvc4

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August 28, 2018 at 9:09am

#940432

The Sylvan Pixie

The sylvan pixie
hopped upon a toadstool
and challenged
all comers
to join
our battle of wits.

1 Like • Comment

August 27, 2018 at 9:36am

#940399

Writer's Block Is Dead!

We shattered
the chrysalis of doubt
by writing the obituary
for demon Writer's Block.

1 Like • Comment

August 26, 2018 at 12:24am

#940346

Good morning!

The smell of coffee,
orange marmalade sunrise,
meadowlark's song
imbue my heart
with happiness.

1 Like • Comment

August 23, 2018 at 12:55pm

#940236

My Memory

First kiss beneath the willow tree,
last kiss on the hospital bed
still ripple through my memory.

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August 22, 2018 at 2:19pm

#940195

Tea Time

Halcyon time with tea
brings stillness to nourish
mind, body, and spirit
in daily ritual.

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August 21, 2018 at 2:36pm

#940142

The Urge to Write

The urge to write
chafes at my consciousness,
until I sit down
and release words from their mental cage.

1 Like • Comment

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