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Le Voyage Magnifique

by Dave

Rated: 18+ · Book · Writing · #1236257

A log of the magnificent journey across the vast sea of my imagination.

A sig awarded for winning "The Anything Goes Poetry Contest"

A log of our magnificent journey.

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StephBee - House Targaryen

Dec 7, 2023 at 9:47pm
In response to "Thanksgiving Restoration"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Henry van Dyke, the progresses from feeling, to expression to action inspired by a thanksgiving gathering.

WHAT I LIKED

I like how each stanza started with "I'm thankful for..." The repetition was as soothing as the sentiments expressed.

STRUCTURE

As per the notes, this is loosely based on a monchielle styled poem.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "the smell of Grammy's turkey dressing,"

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem progresses much like van Dyke's quote, from feeling to expression to action/being in the moment of a thanksgiving gathering.

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Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

Oct 30, 2023 at 1:36am
In response to "A Halloween Celebration"

Nice rhythm and alliteration! The rhymes work as well. Edit and versify and voila... you have a free-verse poem (or a prose poem) for Shadows & Light.

My dreamy brain... ghoulish? dark? My nightmares are definitely disturbing and don't always dissipate with daylight.

Needless to say, I like it.

Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

May 19, 2023 at 9:25am
In response to "Poppies"

I do like it. The rhythm is nice. I appreciate bravery/Normandy/memory.

"because" doesn't work for me. No suggestions though.

1 Like

StephBee - House Targaryen

Jan 5, 2023 at 5:40pm
In response to "SILENT NIGHT"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM
A poem about the nature of the Christmas season.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the acrostic of "silent night" painted the beauty of winter.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. It is where the first letter of the line spell out a word or a phrase.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the poem easy to read. Good use of WDC ML.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no other suggestions. Nice word play. You can feel the weather nipping at your cheeks. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

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Dave

Jan 3, 2023 at 8:32am
In response to "The Gravel Path"

I am glad you posted this on the forum so everyone else can enjoy it.

1 Like

Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

Jan 2, 2023 at 3:37pm
In response to "The Gravel Path"

I hurry down a grovel path
to hide from mighty blokes
residing where the mountains scream
at rabid city folks.

I soothe my wounds from acid tongues
among these squirrely butts
and count my blessings every time
White Rabbit brings me nuts.

K.E.

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Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

Dec 31, 2022 at 12:04am
In response to "The Telegram"

Nicely done. Eastern Montana has a BIG sky. I live in the west snuggled between mountains.

I loved the openness of Kansas... one reason why I'm going back to Isan in Thailand. "A little bit of who I am" resonates with wide open agricultural areas.

Dave

Dec 10, 2022 at 9:12am
In response to "The Telegram"

Thanks, Kat!

1 Like

Redtowrite

Dec 10, 2022 at 8:51am
In response to "The Telegram"

Paints a breathtaking visual and a feeling of freedom and lightness from our daily troubles. Beautiful writing. Holiday peace to you.

Kat

Kåre Enga in Udon Thani

Aug 16, 2022 at 6:44pm
In response to "GETAWAY"

So many 'b's. Alliterative on purpose?

The Caymans may not be far enough away. I'd go to Thailand... easier to get lost in a sea of people. Or Colombia.

1 Like

September 30, 2018 at 12:56am

#942193

Nefarious Characters

Nefarious characters
with vacuous brains
spout spurious claims
for insidious purpose.

1 Like • Comment

September 28, 2018 at 11:59am

#942128

Existential Wit

The existential wit
of residential grit
is quintessential fit
for presidential twit.

1 Like • Comment

September 17, 2018 at 10:51am

#941581

Hallelujah!

The skies looked sinister
until minister delivered his sermon
with robust
"Hallelujah!"

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September 9, 2018 at 8:51pm

#941127

Dormant

A creative spirit
lies dormant
within each of us,
waiting to be aroused
from its slumber.

1 Like • Comment

September 8, 2018 at 5:51pm

#941059

HELP!

My dearest friend Truth
is drowning in a deluge
of propaganda, rumor,
and speculation.

7 Like • Comment

September 7, 2018 at 5:58pm

#940996

Paying Homage

Paying homage to
sultry sunset blush,
fireflies flicker, float
and mingle among
stars in night sky.

2 Like • Comment

September 6, 2018 at 4:26pm

#940942

The Tempest

The tempest of political angst
by pompous pundits
sweeps rational discourse
down the sewer.

2 Like • Comment

September 5, 2018 at 5:40pm

#940872

Flashes

Ephemeral flashes
of inspiration
come and go,
helter-skelter,
like fireflies in the night.

6 Like • Comment

September 4, 2018 at 4:09pm

#940819

Our Opulent Soiree

Unicorns, pixies, poets
come together
with bells and whistles
for
opulent birthday soiree.

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September 2, 2018 at 12:56pm

#940686

Balloon Rising

Clear September morning,
hot air balloon
rises with the sun--
free to roam.

1 Like • Comment

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