I really like this as is but I share some thoughts:
Now go the hell away. Very good use of this line. I'd make it the title unless a specific event or place comes to mind. Like "Workshop, May 32nd, Highway-to-Hell, Nevada".
I'd find active verbs for each use of 'is' and replace each 'the'. Like "May's sky screams blue; Spring's sea blooms green". This provides a season and action, sound, something.
Could use a grammar check unless you like it as is. Grammar is less important in poetry; this isn't an essay. For a definite pause (like for rhythm) you can use an emdash instead of a comma like: "I kid you not — nature's obscene,"
To add "darkness" to it... this is that season...
Explorers with lost souls explore,
Search worlds they've never searched before,
They'll kid you not — forevermore,
Now go the hell away.
12:24 pm
It's that time when all the entries to the Writer's Cramp are in and waiting for the judges choice to win... what an exciting time.. waiting to see if the judge does the right thing by choosing my entry, haha... Of course I'll have it to do over again at 4pm for the 24 syllable poem contest. When I think of all the things I've learned about poetry,,, Dave is another big influence. I take special pride when one of my works wins a contest over his, haha... because I know how good he is and I respect his works so much. Are you ready for the gooblety goop? Shoop shoop poop the bed... hahaha... I wanna have a baby, which is weird for a 63 year old man... I don't mean to adopt, but to experience the joy of being ripped apart at the crotch, losing a critical amount of blood, and after the baby is out having all the attention on it while I fight to stay alive... yeah, sounds like fun, don't it? Somebody give me a prompt!
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