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Sep 14, 2011 at 2:35pm
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Edited: September 14, 2011 at 4:20pm
Review: First Love
A first kiss is always remembered with emotions attached and you definitely were able to convey these through your words.
Some of the lines were a bit choppy, and it felt like you might have been trying to rhyme some words, for the sake of rhyming. Overall it had a good feel to it though.
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First Love · 09-12-11 3:29pm
by cursive-stroke
Re: First Love · 09-12-11 4:21pm
by Leila
Re: First Love · 09-13-11 4:52pm
by Lesley Scott
Re: Re: First Love · 09-14-11 8:51am
by cursive-stroke
*Star* Review: First Love · 09-14-11 2:35pm
by unforgettable1
Re: First Love · 09-15-11 10:51am
by Carwyn
Re: First Love · 09-26-11 10:37pm
by Summer Wind is Healing

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