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Rated: 13+ · Message Forum · Entertainment · #213819
I've got the words, if you've got the time. Gimme your best Para/Poem.
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Mar 7, 2008 at 3:49am
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Re: Nonsense Thursday Edition
Oh, I really like this, but it seems to fall apart in the third verse. Not completely apart. The meaning comes through, but the rhythm doesn't work. There's a minor blip in the rhythm in line 6, too. That doesn't jar me though. I like that verse 3 doesn't seem to be the same rhythm as the first two verses, but that makes me want it to hold together better, be a clear rhythm in itself. Again, I really like this a lot.



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Nonsense Thursday Edition · 03-06-08 10:54pm
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