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The Romance Of Mary Bennett Part One  [ASR]
Mary Bennett needs a romance so I am writing one for her. I hope Jane would approve.
by Princess Megan Rose GOT Fox
Review by Lyn's a sly fox
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Review number # 5 of week April 10-16

Hi,

My name is Lyn and I doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! I have only my humble opinion to offer; please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Romance of Mary Bennett

First Impression: It is always a pleasure to visit your port and this was a treat.

What I liked: The prim manner of the mother, and her scheming to marry her daughter to her choice regardless of her daughter's feelings.

What needs your attention: The opening, needs some tweaking.
Mary Bennett put on her pretty green dress that was low cut but she wore all her dresses low cut. She had to ride her horse to Bath.

Mary Bennett chose a pretty green low cut dress. She loved showing her best assets and riding into Bath was going to deter her from looking her best. Food for thought.

Favorite Parts: Her arrival her home with a divorced man, oh my. oh my. Her mother was beside herself, which made me chuckle. And true to Jane Austin style the daughter was already planning her next move.

Overall Impression: I think it has a lot of potential, looking forward to reading more.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn


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