Hello!

I found this in the review request thread and even though I often feel out of my depth when reviewing poetry, I thought that I would drop by and read the poem and see if I could offer anything constructive.

Overall I really enjoyed the piece. It conveys a beautiful sentiment, it flows well, the first and last stanza mirror each other nicely and overall it's just what I consider to be a good poem.

There was one little section (just a couple lines) where the grammar struck me as off, but not being as proficient a poet I thought the best thing to do would be to bring it to your attention, just to see if I'm wrong.

Your gifts to me all massive,
That's never left my sight


This couplet just struck me as a little awkward - but everything else was perfect!

I hope that this has been at least somewhat helpful and that putting this in the request thread has been earning you lots of good feedback. I had a good time reading your poem, and I wish you all the best with this and any other writing endeavors.

Sincerely,


-Cat









My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .