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 The Children of the Euphrates  [E]
A widow with a secret.
by Scott Wilfred Hemsway
Review by Lornda
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Sun* I enjoyed reading your story! I thought your descriptions were great, and it put me right into the story. The opening paragraphs did a good job of setting the scene. The main character turned out to be something else. Lol! I wasn't expecting that from her, so good work with the twists here and there!

*Sun* As for feedback, I had to take-in a lot of characters all at once for this small of a word count. In the beginning of a story, it's always good to focus in on the main character. There are a few mentioned, and I get that it's setting the scene up, but I'm not sure we needed to know all of their full-names. You also might want to read it out loud because a couple of phrasing of the sentences sounded awkward.

*Sun* Overall, an interesting story with an outcome that was so surprising! The details are written very well, and I really appreciated the visual I got as I read a long. I think it's one of those stories that could be expanded out because the characters are so interesting to read about. I think your last genre choice should be 'Horror' because when I got to the end, that main character chick scared the livin' pajabbers out of me. *Laugh* I hope you do expand on it one day. Keep up the great work!

*Swords* Lornda




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