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 Healing Waters  [13+]
A metaphorical journey of life, that begins with small stream
by pennman
Review of Healing Waters  
Review by Jayne
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello, pennman!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This is a lyrical exploration of nature's transformative power, presented as a journey from a stream to the ocean. This poem engages the reader with its vivid imagery and metaphorical journey that parallels emotional healing and personal growth.

*Checkb*Form, Rhythm, Cadence, and Style:
The traditional rhyming scheme enhances its lyrical quality, making it reminiscent of classic narrative poetry. Its rhythm and cadence feel natural, mimicking the movement of water. Strong word choices give the reader an immersive feeling. The transitions between different bodies of water are handled smoothly.

However, attention to punctuation could help with the flow reading ease, particularly in lines like "I awoke, to the sounds of herons," where the comma after "awoke" disrupts the reading of the rest of the stanza.

*Checkb*Content:
From the playful stream to the wise and stern river and finally, to the embracing ocean, the waters serve as metaphors for life's challenges and the following healing. The narrative is personal and universal, allowing readers to immerse themselves in the experience and find meanings within the watery voyage.

It invites readers on a reflective journey, encouraging them to contemplate their paths through life’s turbulent and calm waters. The poem’s strength lies in connecting the physical landscapes with emotional states, offering a serene meditation on growth and renewal.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
There were glaring problems that affected my enjoyment of the poem.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
This is a beautiful poem that captures the essence of nature’s therapeutic qualities. It is a thoughtful and evocative piece worth revisiting for its scenic beauty and deeper reflections.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayne *Smile*


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