Cutting the Junk in the Trunk

1. Jeff, one of the biggest men you could imagine, walked heavily through the antique store, while Ginnie's eyes looked quickly at each item left quivering in his wake.
The hulking Jeff plodded through the antique store while Ginnie eyed each quivering piece in his wake.

2. The big fuzzy dog lazily dropped to the floor.
The Saint Bernard plopped to the floor.

3. A dirty homeless man walked across the street slowly, as the large crowd of people quickly walked around him.
The homeless man sloughed across the street as the crowd dodged him and hurried on.

4. The pretty girl who sits at the front desk and answers the phone, carefully typed a letter quitting her job to her big fat employer.
The receptionist meticulously typed her resignation.

5. The mean looking, bald cop, a really little guy, loudly told us to move quickly from the area.
The malevolent cop barked, "Leave the area now!"

6. The thin taxi driver suddenly braked, causing Beth, his passenger, a blonde haired, blued-eyed woman, to rapidly react.
The taxi screeched to a halt hurling the blonde into the front seat.
The taxi screeched to a halt hurling Beth into the front seat. (This is a hard call, Do we know Beth? Do we care who she is? If so, would she not have been introduced already? )

7. When Ted walked in I noticed right away that he was dressed impeccably, but when he started talking, I hastily moved away, as his breath was very bad.
I was attracted to the impeccably dressed Ted, but retreated when confronted by his halitosis.

8. Nancy, the oldest woman in our office, works very diligently, and faithfully arrives early every day.
Our eldest employee Nancy is a diligent employee in every respect.
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9. Sally sat silently, waiting for someone else to speak first.
Sally waited for someone else to speak first.
(hee hee) Shy Sally sat.

10. I anxiously waited my brown-eyed, beefy husband to arrive home, so I could happily tell him the news.
I couldn't wait for my husband to get home and proclaim my happy news.

11. Carlita walked silently through the pitch black of the deserted, empty house, fingers pushing lightly on each closed door.
At midnight Carlita crept through the deserted house lightly testing each closed door.

12. John hurriedly ate his burger and fries.
John inhaled his burger and fries. (cliché?)
John vacuumed up his burger and fries. OR John siphoned up his burger and fries.

13.The little eyed girl quietly moved behind the couch to hide from her big brother.
The girl hid behind the couch from her brother.

14. She wrote the report unusually neatly.
She meticulously wrote the report.

15. I was visibly upset when the big scary man looked at me with evil eyes.
I began to shake as the giant gave me the evil eye.