Dear de
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Oh I loved you deeply “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
A very good and honest attempt to present the emotions felt when in love and then love lost!
Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
You have rhyme in place in some lines but the following I thought are not: flight - die , sorrow-follow, life-survived,
"cuould" - this is minor typo
"and though it all, my love survived!" - should this be "through"?
Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Josh Brown
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “My First and only true love “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Nice poem and appreciate the way you have written down the emotions. First love is always exciting and true love is bliss.
"Your whole being matches mine
like a hand and glove." the best lines I enjoyed reading.
The rhyming is good except for "existence"- "appearance". I thought these words do not rhyme. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Sammy
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Those days “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same.
Highlights:
Good old childhood days! Your words made me think of my own childhood memories and brought a smile on my face. Thanks
The rhyming is good and goes well with the flow.
"If only now we had a ration of that thrill,
We would live till a hundred and never get ill." Totally agree with this!
Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific except,
"And our hears were all thumping..." Should it be "hearts"??
Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear geniusgal,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “The lady of my heart “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
The moment I read the first line, I knew this poem was about a Mother! A mother is God's greates gift to mankind. I appreciate your love for your mother which can be seen in the words of your work. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Punctuation is missing in some places, for example:
"In the darkest times,
My blanket, she was.
Giving me the warmth,
Strength to fight back my fears" - Without the period after "she was", the flow becomes difficult.
Same applies to the next stanza as well.
These are only my personal views and I am not an expert. Suggestions/Comments
I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Morgan,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Good v/s Evil “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same.
Highlights:
Very well written. We have inside of us both evil and the good. Depending which wolf we feed, determines the winner. Sometimes I fail to understand why evil always wins creating so much bloodshed everywhere.
"Feeling like a bunch of boulders.
One evil.
One good." I like this comparison to boulders and I am sure the good boulder is always heavier because of our selfish motives. Evil is much easier in todays world. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific
Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear RL Crow,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “He will tell you “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same.
Highlights:
A nice piece telling us what the devil can do silently playing with our emotions. We often forget that he is the father of all lies and submit to his evil ways.
Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
A little bit of punctuation was needed to make the flow better
Suggestions/Comments
I was of the view that the word "and" has been used too often but than its your call.
Overall a good attempt to convey the message
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Punky Heart me
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “I'am not sad anymore “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same.
Highlights:
Happy are those who can find true love... but failure does not mean end of the world. I could see the words coming from deep within and the message was clear.
Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Noticed a few:
"mines" - "mine" - I thought would be more suitable.
"...else could make you happier than "I" could" - a suggestion
"...back of your Jacket"
Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Jatog,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “The Melody of birds “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights: Nice imagery which I could easily connect to. As a child during vacations to my grannies, experienced this a lot. But now moving to the city, a concrete jungle, one hardly gets to experience this. Thanks for refreshing memories.
Coming back to your work, you have written it to the rythm of 8-8-8-4 which makes the flow of the poem easy to read and good for the ears.
The internal rhyme is also good and easy going.
Grammar/Punctuation/Typos:
Did not notice any but then I am not an expert and these are just my views.
Suggestions/Comments:
Nothing specific but just that keep writing and keep sharing.
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.b
Dear Aleta Sue,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Passion “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same.
Highlights: I like the way you have used all the five senses to define passion. Very good concept.
A little more imagery to connect passion to lavender in the first three senses would have made this even better.
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Trisha,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “For my Dad “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same.
Highlights: Nicely written emotions, memories. I liked the way you have started each stanza. Watching your loved ones sink in front of you is sure very painful. Suggestions/Comments: "Loving
Every memory of you
Every song you used to sing to me
The books you used to read
The smiles on your face
This hurts"
I liked this stanza. Memories is all we have and these are so precious that it hurts.
I would suggest that If you could just work a bit on the last stanza then this piece could be still better. But this is just my thought and you would know better.
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Miranda,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Why I wake early“.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same.
Highlights: You have managed well to explain the beginning of a new morning, a blessing from God. Suggestions/Comments:
A little bit of punctuation could have helped in the flow of the poem
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Prosperous Snow
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Live One day at a time “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same.
Great thoughts in black and white! Very Well Said and there is nothing that can be disagreed.
The flow while reciting the lines was perfect and smooth.
The last stanza is so very good. Especially the line where in you mention joy being grown in soil watered with tears. Tears which we shed do strengthen us and help to grow in life.
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I too am a humble writer trying to learn and improve from friends like you.
So keep writing and keep sharing.
Dear Gervic,
I have just read your poem, “If Trees are Gone” MY IMPRESSION:
Great job done! "APPLAUSE".
A beautiful poem that stirred the truth which we are ignoring... Could not say any better than this. Hope more people read this!
The flow of the poem is good, rhyming in place except in the last two lines - "Become/Gone"! GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS:
"what would he yields?" - if you review this line again, it could help, like replacing "would" with "does"... Well, just my views and I am not an expert. SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I am just a humble writer myself, trying to learn and would never be so vain to think my ideas are better.
All the best and Keep writing.
Thanks for sharing your work
Take care and have a nice day
Love and Prayers
Agnelo
Dear strlcuckoo,
I have just read your poem, “Branding in the spring” MY IMPRESSION:
Well this reminds me of some old western movie scene! Enjoyed reading it.
My favorite stanza:
"To the east
The sky glows red
Coffee’s aroma
Cowboys awake from bed"
Perfect description of sunrise!
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS:
Nothing that I noticed but then I am not an expert and these are just my views.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I am just a humble writer myself, trying to learn and would never be so vain to think my ideas are better.
All the best and Keep writing.
Thanks for sharing your work
Take care and have a nice day
Love and Prayers
Agnelo
Dear Shaara,
I have just read your poem, “Death” MY IMPRESSION:
Beautifully penned…Easy to read and understand…the philosophy about death of which we are so much afraid of.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS:
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
The last verse is my favorite… so much truth behind those three lines
I am just a humble writer, trying to learn from good writers like you around.
Just to add, one of my favorite quotes about death since childhood: “Death comes to all But great achievements raise a monument which shall endure until the sun grows old.” ―George Fabricius
Keep writing and thanks for sharing your work
Take care and have a nice day
Love and Prayers
Agnelo
Dear Ethan ,
I have just read your poem, “A conversation with God” MY IMPRESSION:
Well-conceived conversation between man and God. It is true that we turn to God only in our needs!
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS:
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Would suggest that you properly separate the stanzas so that reading/understanding becomes easier to know when God is speaking and when man is speaking.
This work of yours has the potential to be a great poem with a little polishing here and there
I am just a humble writer myself, trying to learn and would never be so vain to think my ideas are better.
Keep writing and thanks for sharing your work
Take care and have a nice day
Love and Prayers
Agnelo
Dear Redtowrite
A very touching emotional poem indeed! The pain and agony to see the one we love sinking is terrible. And you have penned the emotions very well.
I can very well understand what you must have gone through as it is evident in your words especially in the following two lines:
"Listen to your slowing heartbeat,
I fail to understand, fight a mad desire to run."
Thanks for sharing and looking forward to read more of your work.
Keep on writing..write on!
Dear Awesomeness Aman x3,
Thanks for sharing your work.
Your poem is nice and aptly defines the importance of time in our life and even a second is as important. Every second brings in changes in our life and memories is all we have once it is gone!
All the best!
Keep writing and let the emotions flow
Take care and have a nice day
Love Prayers
Dear Kenzie,
Thanks for this beautiful article on prayer I have come across in the recent past. Prayer is powerful and our tool of communication with God. It does not matter how we word it as rightly said by the quote from Charles B. Vaughan which you have mentioned. Furthermore, I liked the concept of thanking and praying even in those small things which we often do in our everday life like the child saying that Jesus is like mayonaise in its Tuna sandwich. We get a lot to learn from children, who are truly innocent. And like Jesus said " "Let the little children come to me, and do not hinder them, for the kingdom of God belongs to such as these."
Once again, thank for this beautiful piece.
God Bless you
Dear Whitemorn
I have read your poem and the subject is interesting.
Suggestions/Comments:
Rhyming is good and compliments well, with the flow of the entire poem.
Could have been much better if you had worked on a fixed rhythm format.
“Boredom is far worse than apathy,
because boredom still has hope for something to be.” In this verse, boredom still has hope so it should not be far worse than apathy. And this has also been emphasized in the next few lines too.
You are good writer…keep writing. I am just a humble writer myself and hope you will consider the review in good spirits
Take care and have a nice day
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